for Take Off Your Muddy Boots!9/25/2009 c1 
3BlaznFangurl
EEK! I LOVED this one too! It was so damn sweet. I love when someone in the relationship is in denial! It makes me want to read the original for this one too!
Charles seems like a devilishly sexy guy who knows what he wants *Fans self* I don't know what else to say, their relationship sounds adorable!
Loving yet another one from you, Blazn, Via The Roadhouse Pay it Forward :)
3BlaznFangurlEEK! I LOVED this one too! It was so damn sweet. I love when someone in the relationship is in denial! It makes me want to read the original for this one too!
Charles seems like a devilishly sexy guy who knows what he wants *Fans self* I don't know what else to say, their relationship sounds adorable!
Loving yet another one from you, Blazn, Via The Roadhouse Pay it Forward :)
9/12/2009 c1 4xrawritskalix
Great story! :)
I like how clearly you displayed both of their emotions. It was very easy to understand how they were feelings at all points of the story. Okay, I've got nothing bad to say. So I also like how ended this. It was sweet how you had him give in to Charlie, but that's not exactly what I'm talking about. The last line just made me laugh. :)
~Kali
4xrawritskalixGreat story! :)
I like how clearly you displayed both of their emotions. It was very easy to understand how they were feelings at all points of the story. Okay, I've got nothing bad to say. So I also like how ended this. It was sweet how you had him give in to Charlie, but that's not exactly what I'm talking about. The last line just made me laugh. :)
~Kali
8/29/2009 c1 9Sakina the Fallen Angel
Haha this was so cute, and you managed to portray the personalities of the two characters wonderfully in that short space of text. Well done on mastering the present tense and the voice of the narrator. Loved this!
~ Sakina x
9Sakina the Fallen AngelHaha this was so cute, and you managed to portray the personalities of the two characters wonderfully in that short space of text. Well done on mastering the present tense and the voice of the narrator. Loved this!
~ Sakina x
8/28/2009 c1 27BaxterB
Huh. I guess M/M did not mean what I thought it meant...In fact, I was WAY off. But to the review.
My main complaint is that to me, this doesn't feel complete. It's written well and all, but the ending comes out of nowhere and with it being mostly dialogue, I had no feel for the events. I'm not wording this very well, but basically I think you should add more to it.
Definitely not a bad story, but not in my style.
27BaxterBHuh. I guess M/M did not mean what I thought it meant...In fact, I was WAY off. But to the review.
My main complaint is that to me, this doesn't feel complete. It's written well and all, but the ending comes out of nowhere and with it being mostly dialogue, I had no feel for the events. I'm not wording this very well, but basically I think you should add more to it.
Definitely not a bad story, but not in my style.
8/28/2009 c1 109ADSpencer
Great short story. Very well written, especially the POV-Peter's voice was solid and stayed constant through the story. Also, the events unfolded well, showing the characters' personalities. Well done.
109ADSpencerGreat short story. Very well written, especially the POV-Peter's voice was solid and stayed constant through the story. Also, the events unfolded well, showing the characters' personalities. Well done.
8/25/2009 c1 Hemlock-Key
I don't normally like things done in present tense, but this is short enough that it doesn't bother me overmuch.
It's really cute, I like the play between the two characters. The relationship is easy to understand even in this short snippet because both characters have a good bit of depth behind them even with this short scene.
Overall I liked it, I didn't see any typos or errors and it has a humorous feel to it that I look for when I'm looking for something new to read.
I don't normally like things done in present tense, but this is short enough that it doesn't bother me overmuch.
It's really cute, I like the play between the two characters. The relationship is easy to understand even in this short snippet because both characters have a good bit of depth behind them even with this short scene.
Overall I liked it, I didn't see any typos or errors and it has a humorous feel to it that I look for when I'm looking for something new to read.
4/4/2009 c1 Sheena's Musings
Aw, absolutely delicious. It was witty and cute. Gave me goosebumps reading it.
Aw, absolutely delicious. It was witty and cute. Gave me goosebumps reading it.
4/2/2009 c1 2Tewr
Aw! These two are just so cute! I seriously adore these two characters. Although Peter, dislikes it, they are a cute couple.
I like how you started off "Spring Cleaning" with the whole muddy boots episode, and center their relationship around Charlie's disobedience and sloppiness.
Peter is such a resilient and determined character. He constantly resists Charlie's advances, but still falls for them. Just like what he tries to be unlike. A school girl. XD
2TewrAw! These two are just so cute! I seriously adore these two characters. Although Peter, dislikes it, they are a cute couple.
I like how you started off "Spring Cleaning" with the whole muddy boots episode, and center their relationship around Charlie's disobedience and sloppiness.
Peter is such a resilient and determined character. He constantly resists Charlie's advances, but still falls for them. Just like what he tries to be unlike. A school girl. XD
4/2/2009 c1 3DragonCeres
i like how you portrayed Peter's conflicting emotions near the end and how you describe how Charlie just knows that Peter loves him. Peter's feelings are very relatable and real. i can really sense his emotional conflicts.
another thing i liked was how this chapter was free of verb tense errors, at least nothing that stuck out to me. i know it might seem like a minor thing next to the story itself, but it's really irritating to read a story with inconsistent verb tenses. you're the first person who used the present tense consistently. most other authors jump around as if they can't make up their mind. it made the reading a lot easier and enjoyable.
3DragonCeresi like how you portrayed Peter's conflicting emotions near the end and how you describe how Charlie just knows that Peter loves him. Peter's feelings are very relatable and real. i can really sense his emotional conflicts.
another thing i liked was how this chapter was free of verb tense errors, at least nothing that stuck out to me. i know it might seem like a minor thing next to the story itself, but it's really irritating to read a story with inconsistent verb tenses. you're the first person who used the present tense consistently. most other authors jump around as if they can't make up their mind. it made the reading a lot easier and enjoyable.