for So, this is new7/28/2014 c4 
5nekohime
kyle and his innuendo.. hehe.. give a crazy girl a lot of ideas for her perverted mind. ;)
and an addition to my last review,
3) seth getting a ride (dirtywink) from xander
5nekohimekyle and his innuendo.. hehe.. give a crazy girl a lot of ideas for her perverted mind. ;)
and an addition to my last review,
3) seth getting a ride (dirtywink) from xander
7/27/2014 c3 nekohime
i kinda feel like, with how the girls are acting, it would be possible for seth to think that xander likes him and the girls are giving him a helping hand.. hehe..
and, xander is a porn-ish name? whaaatt? i actually like that name though.. and even used it for my story sometimes..
also, two things that took my attention, and hopefully, you will do something about it..
1) seth and xander making out at the park.
2) seth likes it rough. ;)
i kinda feel like, with how the girls are acting, it would be possible for seth to think that xander likes him and the girls are giving him a helping hand.. hehe..
and, xander is a porn-ish name? whaaatt? i actually like that name though.. and even used it for my story sometimes..
also, two things that took my attention, and hopefully, you will do something about it..
1) seth and xander making out at the park.
2) seth likes it rough. ;)
3/9/2014 c3 4Angel Hertz
Fuckin' Hell! I was laughing my head off! Whoo! Can't wait for the next chapter.
4Angel HertzFuckin' Hell! I was laughing my head off! Whoo! Can't wait for the next chapter.
2/26/2011 c1 3Astir-Lewis
This was actually a good story and was developing nicely why'd you stop? It hurts my heart to see a good story go to waste.
3Astir-LewisThis was actually a good story and was developing nicely why'd you stop? It hurts my heart to see a good story go to waste.
4/6/2009 c1 Sansl
I liked it, was interesting. But there's no reason to point out someone's race so much. You can describe how the person look too, and the reader would figure it out. Instead of saying someone's black or white just describe their skin color, and the color of their hair and eyes. And I saw how you wanted to let the readers know that Yuritzy is Mexican but, the way you did was pretty much silly. Hispanic handwriting.
But yeah, hope you continue it.
I liked it, was interesting. But there's no reason to point out someone's race so much. You can describe how the person look too, and the reader would figure it out. Instead of saying someone's black or white just describe their skin color, and the color of their hair and eyes. And I saw how you wanted to let the readers know that Yuritzy is Mexican but, the way you did was pretty much silly. Hispanic handwriting.
But yeah, hope you continue it.