5/3/2009 c8 WritingWithChocolate
LMAO! FISH BREATH! ahh...*wipes tear from eye*...i wonder who it IS...i wanna say ryan...but...dont think he dressed u as a zorro...ARRGH! UPDATE!

5/2/2009 c8 13Ruby Kart
haha, I'm loving this story. I'm not normally one for romantic cliches, but this is so adorably cute! *insert excited girly scream here* lol

There are quite a few spelling and grammatical errors in here, but I wasn't concerned about them as the story just had me glued!

I'm sure with some rereading, you can easily spot all of them.

Thankyou for the Thankyou.

~ Ruby Kart

(Pay it Forward)

5/1/2009 c7 Till Tonight Do Us Part
I like the relationship that youve created between Kat and Ry and i see how they compliment each other and i love the pole, it hasnt happened to me yet but the door got the best of me last week. also i like the war- like style of laser tag they play.

5/1/2009 c2 19Hydie
twice in this chapter you wrote the words "Cant Danie" and at first I couldn't figure them out, but then I realized, after a lot of deduction that you meant "Can't deny". That might make it a little easier on the reader. :)

5/1/2009 c8 47oNjA
Ew! I absolutely cannot stand fish, they're just nasty and smell disgusting...which is why I like my roommate because she's actually allergic to fish, so no fish smells in here! Woo! That was such an awkward scene though...made me remember my first kiss. I was in the second grade or something and all I remember is walking down the sidewalk to go to my friends house or find my brother when this kid, who was my other brothers' friend, pulled me behind a bush...yeah it was very weird, I definetely never saw it coming! Afterwards I just got up and walked away like nothing ever happened... insaneness! Okay now I'm just rambling...Great chapter though! I can't wait to see what Ryan and Katie will do for their project... abuse comes to mind though...Can't wait to read more! Update soon, hope you computer gets fixed soon!

~bbyluv

4/30/2009 c4 8Harlequin Friday
Lol, this is so cute.

The character Ryan sounds like this guy I know. xD

But the story line is good so far.

Good luck and continue writing ;D

4/30/2009 c7 47oNjA
That was awesome! I totally want to play laser tag in the mall now! That would be freaking amazing! That almost reminds me of my weird excursions in the mall...this one time we had my brother and another of his friends acted like they were gay, we went around to every store that sold womans' clothes and made them try them on...it was hilarious! It was really to see if they would do it and if the stores would allow a man to try on female clothes...priceless! I will never rid my mind of the image of my brother in a prom dress...*shudders*...it was bad, bright orange halter with sequins everywhere...bleck!

We also like to play dodge ball in Walmart...nothing better than running around Walmart acting like a complete idiot! It's what we call the Walmart Experience...everyone should have one! It's even worse when people keep calling your name, but the problem is that my best friend has the same name as me so we never know who they're talking to! It's an absolute riot!

Great chapter though! I enjoyed it very much! I love Lance the Zorro Teddy! That was absolutely adorable! Karie and Ryan so have to get together! They are perfect for oneanother without being over bearing! He's such a jerk sometimes though! Can't wait to read more, I love this story!

~bbyluv

4/28/2009 c6 WritingWithChocolate
LMAO! Kat is SO FUNNY! Alec and Fi seem so cute together! and who WAS the dude in the zorro outfit...i hav a hunch...but not sure...so...UPDATE!