for Always and Forever Yours6/4/2009 c1 
4anitsirK
Hahahaha! That was good. But at the last segment, I was like, "WTHeck?". Lol. Still cute, though.
4anitsirKHahahaha! That was good. But at the last segment, I was like, "WTHeck?". Lol. Still cute, though.
5/11/2009 c1 Hear Harmony
I think there were definitely a few kinks that could be worked out to make it absolutely nearly perfection, but I can't remember them because I'm entirely unhelpful and am distracted by the hilarity of the last sentence. Wait, no, I remembered them. I agree with Ravina's review, a bit more detail and I think you could have revised some of your lines to better fit the mood.
Other than that... Um, I want my own Quinn. Like now. It was adorable.
I think there were definitely a few kinks that could be worked out to make it absolutely nearly perfection, but I can't remember them because I'm entirely unhelpful and am distracted by the hilarity of the last sentence. Wait, no, I remembered them. I agree with Ravina's review, a bit more detail and I think you could have revised some of your lines to better fit the mood.
Other than that... Um, I want my own Quinn. Like now. It was adorable.
4/16/2009 c1 Grace
Very cute!
Very cute!
4/15/2009 c1 28woodstock1969
I just have to say, great last line. =) The story itself was adorable, too.
28woodstock1969I just have to say, great last line. =) The story itself was adorable, too.
4/15/2009 c1 9Lily Llynn
It's cute, but the last part (the only first person POV part) was most definitely unnecessary and I wish there was some sentence variety. A lot of subject-verb, subject-verb. But yeah, very cute and realistic (enough for me), and I'm very glad artistic dreamer added this to our c2. (:
9Lily LlynnIt's cute, but the last part (the only first person POV part) was most definitely unnecessary and I wish there was some sentence variety. A lot of subject-verb, subject-verb. But yeah, very cute and realistic (enough for me), and I'm very glad artistic dreamer added this to our c2. (:
4/14/2009 c1 24Ravina
I really like the transition of events, and the events themselves, but I think you can add more detail to the italicized bits to improve the story!
But I really enjoyed reading it! Good job!
- Rebekah
24RavinaI really like the transition of events, and the events themselves, but I think you can add more detail to the italicized bits to improve the story!
But I really enjoyed reading it! Good job!
- Rebekah
4/13/2009 c1 2ThisArtWar
Ahahaha "That is until the kids came along." I laughed at that. Great story, very cute. I enjoyed reading it.
~Fell Off Her Rocker Again
2ThisArtWarAhahaha "That is until the kids came along." I laughed at that. Great story, very cute. I enjoyed reading it.
~Fell Off Her Rocker Again