for Itch Me Not4/26/2009 c1 criti-sized
This was a very quirky poem, if it wasn't anything else. I really liked the way that you led up to everything, and how you managed to get the narrator's voice through to the readers, which is kinda hard in a poem. Also, the sarcastic undertone that you mentioned was in it was very great, it helped create the sense of where the poem was going.
C.S.
This was a very quirky poem, if it wasn't anything else. I really liked the way that you led up to everything, and how you managed to get the narrator's voice through to the readers, which is kinda hard in a poem. Also, the sarcastic undertone that you mentioned was in it was very great, it helped create the sense of where the poem was going.
C.S.
4/18/2009 c1 
125MidnightSun95
lol. That was humorous. I was confused about the itching when someone proposed it was pregnancy. I was thinking "you don't itch during pregnancy, do you?" And then I saw that it was poison ivy. XD I guess you meant for a surprise.
Nice work!
125MidnightSun95lol. That was humorous. I was confused about the itching when someone proposed it was pregnancy. I was thinking "you don't itch during pregnancy, do you?" And then I saw that it was poison ivy. XD I guess you meant for a surprise.
Nice work!
4/16/2009 c1 21Patrick-Henry
Ha! That was awesome.
I really loved the story, and the imagery. I could see the whole thing.
I wasn't so into the two lines, "It's you who looms in my closet/It's you who lurks under my bed." I thought they were unrelated.
Great poem. Ha.
21Patrick-HenryHa! That was awesome.
I really loved the story, and the imagery. I could see the whole thing.
I wasn't so into the two lines, "It's you who looms in my closet/It's you who lurks under my bed." I thought they were unrelated.
Great poem. Ha.
4/16/2009 c1 1crazyman12
HA! This was so delightfully funny :) I've been having a bad day and this just lightened up my mood. I love the humorous tone it has, even the randomness...especially the link to poison ivy. I've been there and it's not fun .
favorite stories: check
great job!
~Habs
1crazyman12HA! This was so delightfully funny :) I've been having a bad day and this just lightened up my mood. I love the humorous tone it has, even the randomness...especially the link to poison ivy. I've been there and it's not fun .
favorite stories: check
great job!
~Habs
4/16/2009 c1 2Tewr
I really enjoy all of your poems because they're so original. I love the irony of the entire situation. The speaker is bemoaning her misfortune at a 'missing spleen' but she only has poison ivy.
I was sympathetic for her, now...I just don't know what to think. Which is good. I especially liked the meter in the last three stanzas. It was very quick, emphasizing her anxious mood while creating suspense for the reader as they approach the end of the poem. Nicely done.
2TewrI really enjoy all of your poems because they're so original. I love the irony of the entire situation. The speaker is bemoaning her misfortune at a 'missing spleen' but she only has poison ivy.
I was sympathetic for her, now...I just don't know what to think. Which is good. I especially liked the meter in the last three stanzas. It was very quick, emphasizing her anxious mood while creating suspense for the reader as they approach the end of the poem. Nicely done.