2/27/2011 c1 1Splash Where Tear Drops
Good poem! Just one thing:

Path is block, this is a sin

Did you mean: "Path is blocked, this is a sin"?

Sugestions: Maybe it should be simpler

#1: Path is blocked, this is sin

or

#2: The path is blocked, this feels like sin

You can leave it, I'm not flaming, I'm helping (I hope).

Happy writing!

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