for Paladin's Quest9/26/2012 c1 Dragon Kaiju Prince
Okay I know this story has been on the site for a while but I couldn't help but come back and read this. I thought this was a pretty decent story. The first couple of chapters seemed a little underdone, like there wasn't as much effort put into it that there could have but as the chapters progressed it got better although it still feels it could have been better. Doune seems like a little too cliched' a protagonist but that's alright, it was intended to be this way. Over all the story is pretty good, I'd give it a "B"
Okay I know this story has been on the site for a while but I couldn't help but come back and read this. I thought this was a pretty decent story. The first couple of chapters seemed a little underdone, like there wasn't as much effort put into it that there could have but as the chapters progressed it got better although it still feels it could have been better. Doune seems like a little too cliched' a protagonist but that's alright, it was intended to be this way. Over all the story is pretty good, I'd give it a "B"
7/31/2004 c17 
2nightdragon0
I definitely saw some of the things that inspired you, considering they do the same for me. But I've really enjoyed reading through this story, even if quite a bit was for the dragons.
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Shinryu's personality was one I liked quite a bit. You know, kid with a father really high up and wanting to prove himself.
Oh, the color change with him was neat too, I really didn't expect it. Was it intentional too that his name can be translated to 'death dragon' in Japanese?
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Bahamut would make most think of Final Fantasy immediately, but I know there's an actual legend about Bahamut out of the game. He's the highest of the 'metal' dragons, platinum if i remember.
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Silverheart and Ward defintely have traits that make them seem unique, being sort of the White mage and dark knight.
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Hm, I probably had more to say that I've forgotten, but I'll go on to the sequal. Hey, with the dragons around, I definitely would!
2nightdragon0I definitely saw some of the things that inspired you, considering they do the same for me. But I've really enjoyed reading through this story, even if quite a bit was for the dragons.
.
Shinryu's personality was one I liked quite a bit. You know, kid with a father really high up and wanting to prove himself.
Oh, the color change with him was neat too, I really didn't expect it. Was it intentional too that his name can be translated to 'death dragon' in Japanese?
.
Bahamut would make most think of Final Fantasy immediately, but I know there's an actual legend about Bahamut out of the game. He's the highest of the 'metal' dragons, platinum if i remember.
.
Silverheart and Ward defintely have traits that make them seem unique, being sort of the White mage and dark knight.
.
Hm, I probably had more to say that I've forgotten, but I'll go on to the sequal. Hey, with the dragons around, I definitely would!
3/19/2004 c17 8Crauth
Oh... just... speechless.
I am so jealous of you. Eloquent, infused with passion, there's nothing I can say which you have not achieved. I would have missed out on one of the world's great writers if I did not read your story. Please please please... write some more? Oh, and one last thing, any tips for those that asipre to write?
8CrauthOh... just... speechless.
I am so jealous of you. Eloquent, infused with passion, there's nothing I can say which you have not achieved. I would have missed out on one of the world's great writers if I did not read your story. Please please please... write some more? Oh, and one last thing, any tips for those that asipre to write?
8/17/2003 c1 6Medieval-Rogue
no offense or anything...but that story kinda copies Lord of the Rings-magic, humans wanting more, people finally being killed and lots of destruction ...it really IS like LotR, just thought u should know...
6Medieval-Rogueno offense or anything...but that story kinda copies Lord of the Rings-magic, humans wanting more, people finally being killed and lots of destruction ...it really IS like LotR, just thought u should know...
6/5/2003 c17 14DigiDayDreamer
What a satisfying masterpiece, Blake! This is one of the greatest stories I've ever read in Fictionpress. You had to make a happy ending despite all the killing.
Doune was definitely one main character. Saving the world with the help of his friends is one tough job. And I noticed how much he changed from the beginning to the ending.
Shinryu is quite cool, I admit that. Aside from being the second character to enter the story and first loyal friend of Doune, he also had changed too, emotionally and physically, though not to the extent of Doune's. I just happened to like dragons. And his father just happened to be Bahamut, which I'm sure you've gotten from the Final Fantasy Series. ^_^
Eltruiqs was good ol' himself, magi and all. Yep, he has what I call 'what the mages are made of', especially his age. ^_^ He's also quite a versatile magic caster, useful he is.
Ward was one motley character, being shadowy most of the time and afraid of the light. It's a bit hard to get used to him, but I found him quite funny at times, especially around Shinryu. Another hard-to-get fact is his artificial body, which is quite similar to Wedge's.
Wedge is the plot character! Not is he a great swordsman and quite a robot too, though humaniod he may be, he's also involved in some of the most important events in the latter half of the story (Shinryu taking the former half) and he's awarded for 'advancing the plot the most' character award. Though the name seems to come out from Star Wars itself. ^_^
Last but not least, Silverheart is one whole of a dragon and a healer at the same time. He's my favorite among the six main characters (Next is Shin, of course) of the story, though he appeared somewhere halfway in the story. But what he lacks in punctuality, he makes up in his skills and personality. He's so reserved and dutiful yet is somewhat saintly in his works, dressing his patients in white robes and acting like a nurse at times. ^_^ Also, he can heal a lot better, being a medic and all, he's one of the characters who could have been a perfect substitue for Doune. Yep, he's my fave and nothing can change that!
Also, you suited the chapters quite well, Chapter 1 being 'The World of Ruin' and Chapter 21 being 'The World of Balance'. You should make a sequel out of this and when you do, please bring Silverheart again. Or maybe a prequel? It's up to you, Blake.
Oh, and nice credits too.
Well, I hope with utmost assurance to read your next story!
Never give up writing!
Spell ya later!
14DigiDayDreamerWhat a satisfying masterpiece, Blake! This is one of the greatest stories I've ever read in Fictionpress. You had to make a happy ending despite all the killing.
Doune was definitely one main character. Saving the world with the help of his friends is one tough job. And I noticed how much he changed from the beginning to the ending.
Shinryu is quite cool, I admit that. Aside from being the second character to enter the story and first loyal friend of Doune, he also had changed too, emotionally and physically, though not to the extent of Doune's. I just happened to like dragons. And his father just happened to be Bahamut, which I'm sure you've gotten from the Final Fantasy Series. ^_^
Eltruiqs was good ol' himself, magi and all. Yep, he has what I call 'what the mages are made of', especially his age. ^_^ He's also quite a versatile magic caster, useful he is.
Ward was one motley character, being shadowy most of the time and afraid of the light. It's a bit hard to get used to him, but I found him quite funny at times, especially around Shinryu. Another hard-to-get fact is his artificial body, which is quite similar to Wedge's.
Wedge is the plot character! Not is he a great swordsman and quite a robot too, though humaniod he may be, he's also involved in some of the most important events in the latter half of the story (Shinryu taking the former half) and he's awarded for 'advancing the plot the most' character award. Though the name seems to come out from Star Wars itself. ^_^
Last but not least, Silverheart is one whole of a dragon and a healer at the same time. He's my favorite among the six main characters (Next is Shin, of course) of the story, though he appeared somewhere halfway in the story. But what he lacks in punctuality, he makes up in his skills and personality. He's so reserved and dutiful yet is somewhat saintly in his works, dressing his patients in white robes and acting like a nurse at times. ^_^ Also, he can heal a lot better, being a medic and all, he's one of the characters who could have been a perfect substitue for Doune. Yep, he's my fave and nothing can change that!
Also, you suited the chapters quite well, Chapter 1 being 'The World of Ruin' and Chapter 21 being 'The World of Balance'. You should make a sequel out of this and when you do, please bring Silverheart again. Or maybe a prequel? It's up to you, Blake.
Oh, and nice credits too.
Well, I hope with utmost assurance to read your next story!
Never give up writing!
Spell ya later!
5/9/2003 c11 DigiDayDreamer
Hi, Blake Wales.
Just got here and I want to say, "This is an excellent story! Keep it up!" Yes, I was really amazed, pushing your readers into an entirely different world.
Dragons are cool, don't you think?
Adding you to my favorites lists is a good thing. May you shine among others, you deserve more reviews than this.
The only flaws I could find are mostly grammatical and spelling errors. Also, the references to games like ff8 and diablo can be a bit distracting. Also, the author notes can be annoying too, being in parenthesis can really attract attention from the story. Just remove the parenthesis and make it part of the story instead, except the references, okay?
Otherwise, it's a great read! Hope you continue this soon.
Spell ya later!
Hi, Blake Wales.
Just got here and I want to say, "This is an excellent story! Keep it up!" Yes, I was really amazed, pushing your readers into an entirely different world.
Dragons are cool, don't you think?
Adding you to my favorites lists is a good thing. May you shine among others, you deserve more reviews than this.
The only flaws I could find are mostly grammatical and spelling errors. Also, the references to games like ff8 and diablo can be a bit distracting. Also, the author notes can be annoying too, being in parenthesis can really attract attention from the story. Just remove the parenthesis and make it part of the story instead, except the references, okay?
Otherwise, it's a great read! Hope you continue this soon.
Spell ya later!
4/29/2003 c1 me
i started reading again (yea)
i started reading again (yea)
4/23/2003 c2 2nightdragon0
Looks good! I really like the dragon's personality!
I'll review more as I read on
2nightdragon0Looks good! I really like the dragon's personality!
I'll review more as I read on
4/2/2003 c1 Krystal
Hey hows it goin, its been a while, so im starting from the beginning again, so bear with me, loving it so far, see you in the next chapter.
Hey hows it goin, its been a while, so im starting from the beginning again, so bear with me, loving it so far, see you in the next chapter.
4/2/2003 c1 Krystal
Hey hows it goin, its been a while, so im starting from the beginning again, so bear with me, loving it so far, see you in the next chapter.
Hey hows it goin, its been a while, so im starting from the beginning again, so bear with me, loving it so far, see you in the next chapter.
12/29/2002 c10 8Cinnabar Scarlett
Very very well written! It took me a long time to read this story, but it was well-worth it. Yay! Go Samus! Go metroid! (sorry). ANYWAY, I like your plot for this story. It's very nice, and your writing style is nice. Very informative. Your grammer isn't as bad as you say it is, though! Don't be so hard on yourself! Maybe some more descriptions would be nice, but then again, I'm obsessed with discriptions. ^-^;;
If you're ever feeling bored and want to read a long fantasy epic, check out my story,
The Saga of Eruune. ^-^;;
-Cinnabar Scarlett (Luke)
8Cinnabar ScarlettVery very well written! It took me a long time to read this story, but it was well-worth it. Yay! Go Samus! Go metroid! (sorry). ANYWAY, I like your plot for this story. It's very nice, and your writing style is nice. Very informative. Your grammer isn't as bad as you say it is, though! Don't be so hard on yourself! Maybe some more descriptions would be nice, but then again, I'm obsessed with discriptions. ^-^;;
If you're ever feeling bored and want to read a long fantasy epic, check out my story,
The Saga of Eruune. ^-^;;
-Cinnabar Scarlett (Luke)
11/27/2002 c10 camarobuns
Great!
Nice eye for detail.
I so did not see that change of color coming
Great!
Nice eye for detail.
I so did not see that change of color coming
11/2/2002 c10 Tim
This is an incredable story! I simply love it, though I dearly wish it could have gone on much longer. It's good, though, that it was left off in a fittimng place, rather than a more drastic cliffhanger like during a battle scene or something, it's a really great peice of work. I hope to see more.. if more is to be written, and keep up the excelent work!
This is an incredable story! I simply love it, though I dearly wish it could have gone on much longer. It's good, though, that it was left off in a fittimng place, rather than a more drastic cliffhanger like during a battle scene or something, it's a really great peice of work. I hope to see more.. if more is to be written, and keep up the excelent work!
9/21/2002 c9 me
Highly descriptive, but you need to proof read.
Finish the story soon!
Highly descriptive, but you need to proof read.
Finish the story soon!
9/21/2002 c6 me
Damn youre good
Damn youre good