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2/9/2013 c3 2End Noesis
What a pleasant surprise to see another chapter so soon. Thanks for the little shout out at the end, made me feel special :]
Sienna does not disappoint!
"I didn't know why, but whenever I was around an attractive and successful woman I couldn't help but feel personally threatened." I know 100% how she feels. It doesn't help that you're not looking your best and that you're in a compromising situation.
Great dialogue between Riley and Sienna. Love your description of his glass place, so cold and transparent, which is what you expect Riley to be. Description of hair as earth rust, Rottweiler in a tutu, and many others were much enjoyed. As someone who reads fanfiction a lot and has read things being described the same way a billion times, it's so refreshing to find creativity. That's why I go to Fictionpress; there so many talented writers here, which obviously includes you.
Paragraph starting with "F***king prat." ended with "it he," did a sentence get cut off? The one starting with "Ow, ouch..." ended with a comma instead of a period. Paragraph beginning after July 15, partners body should be "partner's body." Minor errors, don't mean to be a nitpicker, since I know you're a good writer and all. Doesn't detract from the story at all, but I thought you should know. I hope I don't come across as a nuisance for this.
2/8/2013 c3 leavemeialone
I don't know how you do this . . . but you really pull me in. I don't know what is going to happen now. When they part, would they really part for some time? Is there going to be a time lapse between when they'll see each other again? I keep wondering if the time in the beginning of the chapter is significant. Is the time going to jump to so and so years later? Then Riley seems so sweet . . . sweet isn't the right word. I mean he is just so caring. As for Sienna, I think it does her some good to get shaken up. I like just some Riley can get to her . . . like emotionally. She needs somebody like that. Please update soon! Don't leave me hanging! :)
2/8/2013 c3 2BloodWillSpill
This chapter took a little while to read but was totally worth it! Sienna, cool name by the way, is a really interesting character. Her attraction to Riley is so tangible and real :). I don't know how to explain it exactly but there's so much chemistry. And Riley's intentions were strange. I think that because he's found someone with a suckier life, it makes him feel more comfortable. It's just an idea. But excellent work!

PS. You made the same mistake and repeated 'I just' twice lol. And, um, when did Riley tell Sienna his last name? I may have missed something or it could be a little error.
2/7/2013 c2 2End Noesis
I'm so happy you updated this story. I really like that you're telling this chapter through Riley's POV, and I assume you'll be switching back and forth between Sienna and him, right? I've been wondering who was that mysterious client, but I also can't wait to read Sienna's update. I'd imagined Riley a lot older like in his twenties, but only because of the car he drove. A little typo: fix to * school's sluts' * If you meant more than one slut at one school. I laughed at writing that in your review. Love that last line :)
2/5/2013 c2 2BloodWillSpill
This was a good chapter. I liked it because although Riley isn't very likeable, you add a lot of energy into his narrative and it keeps you reading. Personally, I thought he was gonna kill himself. You see, he's that unpredictable :). Can't wait to see how these low lives interact! You've got a fan for sure!

P.S. There's an error where you talk about Madison's virginity. You say We Both twice. Just a simple typo. Keep up the good work!
2/4/2013 c2 leavemeialone
This story has always been on my list to read . . . and now I have read the two chapters you have put up so far. I really enjoy it so far. I don't know what to expect . . . but I am super excited to see what is going to come of it. I really want to know Sienna and what has lead her to make her choices today. I also want to know the two age differences. As for Riley, I think he'll be interesting to see. From the summary and what has been given so far, he does sound like he wants a therapist to talk to . . . or really someone just to understand him. I think that it is sweet . . . and she sounds like someone who will be closed off. I can't wait to see their interactions that will lead to their development and love for one another. I know if all the chapters were up for this story and you weren't rewriting this story, I would be staying up to read this awesome story. I am already so hooked! :)
1/22/2013 c1 BloodWillSpill
That was spectacular! You provided plenty of description and personality to your main character. I wonder where her scars came from? And who is this golden stranger? I'm just as anxious as your MC. I look forward to your next update!
1/18/2013 c1 2End Noesis
You have a way of making vulnerable female characters seem so strong. At first, I wanted to pity her, but her hilarious standard in John's made me adore her for clinging to whatever bit of pride she still possessed. The reviews speak for themselves, we want more ;)
8/27/2012 c1 wow
i'd find it more realistic if she kept reasoning she wasnt in love until after all of that they ahem are uh gonna do yeah...but other than that it was good .
9/13/2011 c16 EMiLY
PLEASE CONTINUE THIS STORY... :) i absolutely LOVE it...
8/23/2011 c16 LandOfPeoples
Wow I love this chapter. I didn't think Sie would actually have sex with Jake but when they came so close to doing it; I was glad because I thought Riley deserves to have his feelings hurt. But it was hilarious when Jake came prematurely. I love how Sienna handled it. Can't wait to see what happens next!
7/16/2011 c10 Fragile Things
This was a painful chapter. Nice job with the blackouts, they were written well. Madison is nastier than I would have thought her little brain could handle :D
7/16/2011 c8 Fragile Things
Rose is an unexpected plot twist. IDK what to expect at all right now...
7/16/2011 c7 Fragile Things
I love Sienna's chapters, they have so much more depth! I liked the exchange between the girls, it was raw and well written. Her emotions are something I can easily sympathize with and their expressed very well by you. :)
7/16/2011 c6 Fragile Things
Haha interesting way for him to first see her, he must live pretty obliviously to everything. Oh Riley so full of your testosterone driven angst, what shall we do with you? :D What's with the blonde chick I wonder? It feels a little rushed, like your jumping from plot point to plot point. I like the Chapter title for this one, very appropriate. Also I like how Sienna has a few of your characteristics. That's pretty cool. I shall continue...
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