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8/13/2010 c1 11HiddenFromYou
You put across an interesting viewpoint. I definitely don't agree with it, but I respect your right to have your opinion.

You have a lot of emotion in this, which you put across well. I didn't quite understand what you meant with this line though:

"once lovely lips into a cackling grin"

It seemed out of place, like it didn't fit with the rest of the poem.
5/13/2009 c1 30Airianna
Yet I would still lay down my life for your right to publicly hate me. Things like this don't even make me angry anymore. Just a little sad. I'm still a person. I still love. I still feel pain, and joy, sadness.

It is a good poem though. Very expressive.
4/26/2009 c1 JAN USMC
TOO BAD YOU CAN`T SPEND A YEAR LIVING UNDER SHIRA LAW.

HOPE YOU REMEMBER THE CROWD THAT GAVE YOU 9/11 ARE STILL

AROUND. SO NIEVE.
4/25/2009 c1 21kunoichi-socks
I really like the way you phrase things, your point came across very clearly. Good job!

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