for Saved By A Werewolf8/11/2014 c2 Guest
You switched from first person to second person in the middle of your writing...
You switched from first person to second person in the middle of your writing...
7/24/2010 c1 Annie
Hey. You really need to check your grammar and spelling or let someone else do it. I gave up reading halfway through the first chapter, that's how annoying it is. Sad, since I'm sure your story is great. Please edit. I see the mistakes have bothered many others, too.
Hey. You really need to check your grammar and spelling or let someone else do it. I gave up reading halfway through the first chapter, that's how annoying it is. Sad, since I'm sure your story is great. Please edit. I see the mistakes have bothered many others, too.
1/16/2010 c3 perfectprincess945
Hey I just figured that I would let you know that I have been reading your story, and I have noticed that you change the point of view a lot. Here is one sentence directly out of your story for an example. "I felt her eyes burn, but she ignored it." in this sentence you switched from first person to third. I have also noticed a few spelling errors but other than that I really like your story and i am enjoying having the privilege to read it.
Hey I just figured that I would let you know that I have been reading your story, and I have noticed that you change the point of view a lot. Here is one sentence directly out of your story for an example. "I felt her eyes burn, but she ignored it." in this sentence you switched from first person to third. I have also noticed a few spelling errors but other than that I really like your story and i am enjoying having the privilege to read it.
1/8/2010 c5 
9Destiny1406
i liked it so far, but it has a lot of errors in it.. i would go back and fix them if i were you. Just a heads up. Also watch for changing POV's it was really confusing when you did.
Also watch for spelling errors... there are a lot of them!
Haybell :0
9Destiny1406i liked it so far, but it has a lot of errors in it.. i would go back and fix them if i were you. Just a heads up. Also watch for changing POV's it was really confusing when you did.
Also watch for spelling errors... there are a lot of them!
Haybell :0
12/24/2009 c15 16Oshini
Wow! That story was amazing! I really like Ashly, she's not like all those other female characters in werewolf/vampires/etc, stories; she's strong and smart.
16OshiniWow! That story was amazing! I really like Ashly, she's not like all those other female characters in werewolf/vampires/etc, stories; she's strong and smart.
12/1/2009 c3 midnightsfury
i like your story, its good, do you know you kept going from first person to second?
i like your story, its good, do you know you kept going from first person to second?
11/29/2009 c1 3VonThunder
I like the plot line so far :) Very intriguing. The only issue I have is that your spelling is slightly off, and that sometimes you use a homonym wrong, such as "she pulled on her cloths" instead of "clothes." But that's pretty much it. I'm enjoying it so far :) Very good!
3VonThunderI like the plot line so far :) Very intriguing. The only issue I have is that your spelling is slightly off, and that sometimes you use a homonym wrong, such as "she pulled on her cloths" instead of "clothes." But that's pretty much it. I'm enjoying it so far :) Very good!
11/14/2009 c1 Ruby Sue
I'm sorry, but I'm just going to go ahead and say it: Have you ever heard of spellcheck?
Because, seriously, almost every other word in this first chapter is spelled wrong!
But I'll keep reading, your summary says it will get better in a couple of chapters and abused girls plus sexy werewolves is usually enough to keep me reading.
I'm sorry, but I'm just going to go ahead and say it: Have you ever heard of spellcheck?
Because, seriously, almost every other word in this first chapter is spelled wrong!
But I'll keep reading, your summary says it will get better in a couple of chapters and abused girls plus sexy werewolves is usually enough to keep me reading.
10/8/2009 c1 3M.Bianca
one question: have you ever heard anyone use "verbal abuseiveness" in daily conversations?
3M.Biancaone question: have you ever heard anyone use "verbal abuseiveness" in daily conversations?
9/21/2009 c15 1midnight84118
great job on this story
sad but happy ending got to love thous ones to
i would like to see the sequel if you plan to make one
good wright to you
1midnight84118great job on this story
sad but happy ending got to love thous ones to
i would like to see the sequel if you plan to make one
good wright to you