for Don't Drink The Coolaid1/1/2011 c37 lala1234142
LOVE LOVE LOVE YOUR STORY! "Nancy" is Very funny. though, I wish she could be more sympathetic towards others instead of a complete *itch until the last moment. Truthfully, I kinda wanted her to go with Leo but I think she is scared because they both share a traumatic experience and he will ind out her secret. Granted, I realize you have not updated in months but, Pretty please will you update?
LOVE LOVE LOVE YOUR STORY! "Nancy" is Very funny. though, I wish she could be more sympathetic towards others instead of a complete *itch until the last moment. Truthfully, I kinda wanted her to go with Leo but I think she is scared because they both share a traumatic experience and he will ind out her secret. Granted, I realize you have not updated in months but, Pretty please will you update?
9/28/2009 c37 
1Love Frog
I think Drew and Jack should end up together. I totally agree with her about Leo. Awesome story. Now I'm dying of anticipation, so please submit the next chapter soon!
1Love FrogI think Drew and Jack should end up together. I totally agree with her about Leo. Awesome story. Now I'm dying of anticipation, so please submit the next chapter soon!
8/19/2009 c1 1Shimpleton
If this is a work of complete fiction you're genius. If you really are a disgruntled teenager who's exhauted from the tedium of life, but still the story is fictitious then it still rings true as a work of genius. If it's all actually true then you're a nut!
I like it! Would definitely read an entire book written like such, good job.
"Word out" or "Peace"... or maybe even "Groovy" dude.
Rock On.
1ShimpletonIf this is a work of complete fiction you're genius. If you really are a disgruntled teenager who's exhauted from the tedium of life, but still the story is fictitious then it still rings true as a work of genius. If it's all actually true then you're a nut!
I like it! Would definitely read an entire book written like such, good job.
"Word out" or "Peace"... or maybe even "Groovy" dude.
Rock On.
8/18/2009 c3 38PersonofthePen
Comparing Mom to Satan? That wouldn't work in my house (thank God she can't hear my thoughts)
38PersonofthePenComparing Mom to Satan? That wouldn't work in my house (thank God she can't hear my thoughts)
8/18/2009 c1 PersonofthePen
That killed me about scaring that guy in front of you (I would so do that!) Ooh, there's more. Expect another review in a few minutes:)
That killed me about scaring that guy in front of you (I would so do that!) Ooh, there's more. Expect another review in a few minutes:)
8/15/2009 c27 6sarcasticism
sorry i'm taking my time with these, for a loser i've been surprisingly busy. i'll try to keep writing as fast as humanly possible
6sarcasticismsorry i'm taking my time with these, for a loser i've been surprisingly busy. i'll try to keep writing as fast as humanly possible
5/27/2009 c19 1The Last Maroon
Sorry I didn't review every chapter, but I read these 19 all the way through before doing this. I felt I had to review the 1st one and now I'll give a general review of the story...so far it's an interesting read. The plot isn't really that captivating but Natalie's an amazing character. There are a few characters (Leo, Hair-Potter-Hair etc) in the story that I'm not sure about (as far as what there significance is), but I'm willing to read to find out. Also what's going on these last two chapters is she bugging or is this guy/face real? Either way Keep writing, I'm enjoying this.
1The Last MaroonSorry I didn't review every chapter, but I read these 19 all the way through before doing this. I felt I had to review the 1st one and now I'll give a general review of the story...so far it's an interesting read. The plot isn't really that captivating but Natalie's an amazing character. There are a few characters (Leo, Hair-Potter-Hair etc) in the story that I'm not sure about (as far as what there significance is), but I'm willing to read to find out. Also what's going on these last two chapters is she bugging or is this guy/face real? Either way Keep writing, I'm enjoying this.
5/27/2009 c1 The Last Maroon
Great introduction to the character. I love her personality, she's very quirky even borderline rude, but it's hilarious so it works. Nice opening chapter
Great introduction to the character. I love her personality, she's very quirky even borderline rude, but it's hilarious so it works. Nice opening chapter
5/25/2009 c17 305-16-93-ashley-gamer-12-03-10
oh man, this is getting so good! please update as soon as possible
305-16-93-ashley-gamer-12-03-10oh man, this is getting so good! please update as soon as possible
5/20/2009 c12 05-16-93-ashley-gamer-12-03-10
I love this story and I like how she nicknames people Pies-R-Us is an awesome nickname, i laughed at it
I love this story and I like how she nicknames people Pies-R-Us is an awesome nickname, i laughed at it
5/3/2009 c1 7gentleduck
The sarcasm is really overwhelming. It was okay at the beginning of the story, but it really started getting on my nerves as the story progressed.
Show, don't tell.
Also, this story is turning out to just be a rant disguised as a story, which is not good if you intend on becoming a serious writer. You've shown us what type of person the protagonist is, show us why she's like that.
7gentleduckThe sarcasm is really overwhelming. It was okay at the beginning of the story, but it really started getting on my nerves as the story progressed.
Show, don't tell.
Also, this story is turning out to just be a rant disguised as a story, which is not good if you intend on becoming a serious writer. You've shown us what type of person the protagonist is, show us why she's like that.