for Siren5/9/2009 c1 Jessie A
This is incredible. It's been a long time since I've read your poetry, but I have a siren of my own, and you have described her just as so. Beautiful.
This is incredible. It's been a long time since I've read your poetry, but I have a siren of my own, and you have described her just as so. Beautiful.
5/1/2009 c1 
1k+Faithless Juliet
Strong portrayals throughout.
Both from the onlooker, and the idol who she observes. You have some amazing verses throughout. The comparison between the girl and chinesse lettering, the imagery surrounding the song she sings, creatures imerging from the ocean to see her.
Wonderful, throughout! Yet, there's some mystery involved as well, it's never really clear if the women is real, or surreal - although, when you find yourself emmersed with someone else they're often put on pedistals.
I think the part that strock the deepest cord with me was the dialogue stanza. I've always loved dialogue in poetry. Excellent work, here, keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.
1k+Faithless JulietStrong portrayals throughout.
Both from the onlooker, and the idol who she observes. You have some amazing verses throughout. The comparison between the girl and chinesse lettering, the imagery surrounding the song she sings, creatures imerging from the ocean to see her.
Wonderful, throughout! Yet, there's some mystery involved as well, it's never really clear if the women is real, or surreal - although, when you find yourself emmersed with someone else they're often put on pedistals.
I think the part that strock the deepest cord with me was the dialogue stanza. I've always loved dialogue in poetry. Excellent work, here, keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.
5/1/2009 c1 Isca
"And in the sun I see the scars of beauty massacred for nothing." This line is so emotionally devastating-such sorrow and pain. Brilliant line. :D
"And in the sun I see the scars of beauty massacred for nothing." This line is so emotionally devastating-such sorrow and pain. Brilliant line. :D
5/1/2009 c1 Amarantha
LOve, love, love. It's wondrous and beautiful and stunning.
LOve, love, love. It's wondrous and beautiful and stunning.
5/1/2009 c1 17Unique1952
Your use of imagery is very good in this piece and you expresses your thoughts nicely as well.
Nice work with this piece.
17Unique1952Your use of imagery is very good in this piece and you expresses your thoughts nicely as well.
Nice work with this piece.