for Broke A Heart I Didn't Know I Had5/1/2009 c1 
22Mi.Ishi
It's a little contradictory, because you say you don't want to leave night, but it's like you're being forced to stay there (by referencing the clipped wings and such) and that you survive it (at the end).
But it's powerful, for sure. Had a nice flow to it, and you finished it off well enough.
Could've probably used a bit more complex language, but for being a personal poem, it was very good.
Cheers and love!
-Shay
22Mi.IshiIt's a little contradictory, because you say you don't want to leave night, but it's like you're being forced to stay there (by referencing the clipped wings and such) and that you survive it (at the end).
But it's powerful, for sure. Had a nice flow to it, and you finished it off well enough.
Could've probably used a bit more complex language, but for being a personal poem, it was very good.
Cheers and love!
-Shay