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5/9/2009 c1 36Kate Marshall
Pssh. It's not sucky. :) I thought your idea was really clever. I liked your take on the prompt, turning it more into a love kind of situation. Very creative.

And I especially liked the beginning, by the way! The dialogue (the very first line) that started the story was cute and endearing and was a great beginning for the theme of this, too.

But I did think the mention of the girl was kind of rushed. Or rather, sudden. Maybe some foreshadowing would've made it smoother? And this is somewhat pointless to mention, but you could space the lines a wee bit more. It was very close to the words.

Anyway, good luck in the WCC! :D

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