10/9/2009 c1 19Eternal Skies
i liked this, the idea behind it. about the five times you fell in love or thought you were. but i didn't like the empty feeling there, i couldn't feel yor pain, or whatever you're feeling. and it didn't give me that feeling of a poem.

"Now I can't breathe

Can't feel a thing

Bleeding internally

Never to trust again" if you've rephrased it into something less cliche and overused, then it'll be awesome.

if you're really hurting, then write what you feel. not what others wanna hear.

hope this helps~~