for Darkness5/24/2009 c1 
2Zoe Marhassa
That's so haunting. I especially like the part in the beginning where you wonder what's staring back at you.
2Zoe MarhassaThat's so haunting. I especially like the part in the beginning where you wonder what's staring back at you.
5/23/2009 c1 36Kate Marshall
This would be even prettier in single-spaced stanzas, I think. (Hold shift while pressing enter or backspace to single-space up or down.) It would arrange your thoughts nicely and look a little cleaner.
I really liked how you described the dark. It was almost personified. Your imagery was very clear, too. (And I loved the exclamation points. Sometimes, in some poems, they look so cheesy, but you used them well.)
Great job,
-Peach/Kate, from the Review Marathon (link's in the profile!)
36Kate MarshallThis would be even prettier in single-spaced stanzas, I think. (Hold shift while pressing enter or backspace to single-space up or down.) It would arrange your thoughts nicely and look a little cleaner.
I really liked how you described the dark. It was almost personified. Your imagery was very clear, too. (And I loved the exclamation points. Sometimes, in some poems, they look so cheesy, but you used them well.)
Great job,
-Peach/Kate, from the Review Marathon (link's in the profile!)