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2/9/2013 c2 AxdriaXa
Do you just always know when to write amazing books? this is great! all your books that i've started reading are ALL good and its shocking! you need to get published as soon as possible! :D x
2/4/2013 c2 1CaciaCoon
Just me, your friendly FP stalker.

Looks very promising!
8/11/2010 c1 1Agatha Thornhill
I must admit, this is one hell of a good yarn, me hearty! But one thing I always say is description! I always want more description! But you've done a damn good job so far. No need to take me advice to heart, I jist hope ye'll do so.

Fair Sailing,

Agatha "Nitpicky" Thornhill
8/6/2010 c3 5Brackynn
Nora is adorable! I would have thought Rod would have a male valet rather than a maid to help him with personal things, but Nora is so instantly likable that it doesn't really bother me. I like how you write her distinctive voice, although there are a few incongruences; sometimes she drops her Hs, sometimes not, and she interchanges how she uses "me" and "my"... I'm not sure if that's a quirk peculiar to her or not.

I wonder why Rod hasn't received letters in reply from Ben. Something tells me it can't be as simple as "too busy". And I'm excited to see what Rod discovers on the moors!
8/6/2010 c2 Brackynn
Oh, I never can resist a mysteriously "empty" Gothic mansions... I get the sense that Rod's uncle is trying to cover something up. But what? Does it connect to Lila? I liked how you showed Rod's relationship with his uncle through their slightly stilted conversation - very nicely done. I wonder what the dream at the beginning signifies... Rod's distress at forgetting little details about her, like her eye colour, was an effective touch. I wasn't entirely sure whether Lila was seven or fifteen in the dream, though.

You're doing great with this story - now onto the next chapter! :)
8/6/2010 c1 Brackynn
Oh, Rod and Lila are just too sweet! Their farewell was very poignant. On occasion, Rod's turn of phrase did strike me as rather mature coming from a ten-year-old mouth, but overall, I found your depiction of their friendship to be convincing and affecting. I'm already hoping that when they meet again, they can be more than just friends!
1/8/2010 c2 40Jean Clement
The way you subtly incorporate recurring details like the lavender dress is very clever. It allows us to form an idea of Lila's looks and character, without explicitly describing it.

I noticed too you have a very imaginative use of vocabulary that may sometimes be unusual, but just expresses the meaning you are trying to get at. I loved how you described Lila's voice as 'cooing', and say the carriage 'prattled' over a bump - a very creative onomatopoeia.

And as always, lonely manors on the Yorkshire moors must intrigue!

I hope you will add more to this story soon.

All best,

Jean
1/8/2010 c1 Jean Clement
Since I'm currently reading 'A Passage to India',your story jumped out at me and I couldn't resist.

You hit a very good note in the children's conversations: their behaviour and speech are very convincing. It's impressive how, by introducing them as children, you win the reader's sympathy for the protagonists, and lay the foundations on which you will build their developing characters.

I did however, never having been to India, crave a better picture of the setting - I personally would have liked more descriptions. Also, the transitions between the various scenes were rather abrupt; but then again that does reflect the quick, confusing changes in situation Rod and Lila are experiencing.

I already love your characters and look forward to reading more about them.

Best wishes,

Jean
8/29/2009 c2 18deepbluesari27
i luvd th first 2 chapters. great job! :) i hope u update soon, i cant wait to read when they meet up again.
6/3/2009 c1 13Menginpeh
I love childhood friendships that turn into adult romances. :)
6/3/2009 c2 10LeenElle
I was a little confused with the opening dream, how old was Rod when he was having this dream? Was it eight years later, or right after he was taken away from the epidemic? I think if it was eight years later, like the quick awakening suggests, you should maybe have put the Eight Years later break before the dream? Maybe, just to avoid confusion...of course, I could have been the only one confused. Also, if the dream was eight years later, I think that maybe Lila would have matured in Rodericks mind... maybe? You could even have a description of how he thinks she might look. "The hair that had always been braided now tumbled around her shoulders in loose curls," or something like that. Just a suggestion.

I was also a little confused by some of Rod's statements. I couldn't figure if he was a bad student or just bothered by some of the things that happened at school? I would love to know more of his story, about what has happened to him in the past 8 years! I'm sure you'll fill us in on that point. I'm also curious about the abandoned house and Uncle practically charging him to become a hermit...I actually checked your description to see if you had defined it as a mystery, haha. Good chapter, but I must admit I'm looking forward to Lila and Rod meeting back up. I'm sure that's where all of the action lies!
6/3/2009 c2 JZK
seems intersting enough

so is lila indian or french or english or what?
6/1/2009 c2 30sophiesix
Hi, great story! Lovely turns of phrase and dialogue. i agree with Leenelle though about the parents bit in chapter one - that was really confusing for me. Looking forward to teh next chapter
5/31/2009 c2 4MidnyghtVampyrezz
Ah, I love it! Tis amazing!

Update soon please!
5/17/2009 c1 10LeenElle
A really good start! This is a brilliant background for a story. I am totally hooked, so I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Just a couple things. First, I think your transition between the marketplace scene and the scene with Rodrick and his parents would be more effective if you put a line between those two sections. I had trouble adjusting to what was going on. Also I thought that there saying goodbye to each other was a little grown up for being only 7 and 10. I think their first conversation about wanting to play certain games was awesome, and very realistic. But, their goodbyes seemed a little too emotional to be coming from young kids? Totally my opinion. I am so looking forward to the next chapter! Hope it won't be a long wait!
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