for Innocence and Petulance2/17/2010 c23 blackrule
aw the epilogue was so short :( when can we expect the sequel? 'tis the only way to satisfy us fans :D At least you didn't leave us hanging somewhere else in the story, like the part a couple chapters ago where he had to rescue her and we didn't know how everything tied in with the beginning. oh now I can't wait. I had forgotten about this story for a while myself but once I started reading the chapter everything came back. I myself have had a busy few months. I've got a job (for the first time ever) and been researching scholarships to get through college. Anyway hope to find the sequel up soon hehehe till then adieu!
aw the epilogue was so short :( when can we expect the sequel? 'tis the only way to satisfy us fans :D At least you didn't leave us hanging somewhere else in the story, like the part a couple chapters ago where he had to rescue her and we didn't know how everything tied in with the beginning. oh now I can't wait. I had forgotten about this story for a while myself but once I started reading the chapter everything came back. I myself have had a busy few months. I've got a job (for the first time ever) and been researching scholarships to get through college. Anyway hope to find the sequel up soon hehehe till then adieu!
2/16/2010 c23 
1PumaRaw
Can you read my story and tell me if its good or not? Like what I should work on? Please and thank you! :) I love your stories by the way
1PumaRawCan you read my story and tell me if its good or not? Like what I should work on? Please and thank you! :) I love your stories by the way
2/16/2010 c23 53HoldingRunaways
Aw such a short chapter D: But it definitely opens up a sequel! -hint hint-
An amazing story, I love it =]
53HoldingRunawaysAw such a short chapter D: But it definitely opens up a sequel! -hint hint-
An amazing story, I love it =]
2/16/2010 c23 Chocorange888
Thank you for updating! I was really happy to see an alert in my mail today, I thought the ending was slightly abrupt and I was a bit concerned with the lose ends which still seems to be there, but since there will be a sequal, I have nothing to worry about. Happy Chinese New Year.
Thank you for updating! I was really happy to see an alert in my mail today, I thought the ending was slightly abrupt and I was a bit concerned with the lose ends which still seems to be there, but since there will be a sequal, I have nothing to worry about. Happy Chinese New Year.
2/16/2010 c23 5SoUsay234
Yei! Finally...
Though it makes me kind of sad that it's over.
Hope you make a sequel.
Great writing.
And good luck ^^
5SoUsay234Yei! Finally...
Though it makes me kind of sad that it's over.
Hope you make a sequel.
Great writing.
And good luck ^^
2/6/2010 c22 September Stone
Is tht the end?
I really enjoyed this story, you have a very interesting take on demons. I also really liked the way you accentuated your points/ ideas throughout the story. Not to metion the way you illustrated the characters thoughts and emotions within the text.
Just one more thing is 'Addicted'the final title? I'm not sure I agree with it, however at the moment I cant seem to come up with anything better!
Good job! (:
Thanks a bunch!
Is tht the end?
I really enjoyed this story, you have a very interesting take on demons. I also really liked the way you accentuated your points/ ideas throughout the story. Not to metion the way you illustrated the characters thoughts and emotions within the text.
Just one more thing is 'Addicted'the final title? I'm not sure I agree with it, however at the moment I cant seem to come up with anything better!
Good job! (:
Thanks a bunch!
1/16/2010 c22 86c0rvida3
First, let me just say - OH MY FUCKING GOD!
I read ALL of this story today, I just sat reading it -totally engrosses- smoking my like a demon!
I cannot fathom why your story hasn't gained more responses, you truly are a fucking amazing writer and I'm sad to see that this story hasn't been updated in a while.
And just to touch upon something that a lot of people seem to have a problem with- why is the drugs thing such a crisis? I thought that it added a fantastic dash of realism into a story that surrounds things that we see as being totally unreal; surely that should be something you should be commended for? It certainly is in my eyes, pet!
As I said before, I was totally engrossed- I only found like THREE typos, and your grasp of language is very good. I think I can honestly say that this is the BEST piece of fiction I've ever read on this site, I really, truly did enjoy it. There wasn't one point where I thought 'Oh, it's starting to lose it now', not once did my attention waver.
In fact, I even found it hard to STOP reading, hence the zombie that was me today, sat ignoring my boyfriend while I read this amazing story :P (was totally worth it, words cannot comprehend how much I enjoyed this)
Also, and this is a feat for a writer as I RARELY ever do this, but I cried quite a few times while I read this; you captured Maggie's misery perfectly, and while Finn had his distractions, you did likewise for him.
Again, something that seems to irk everyone else, I thought the time-skips were refreshing. You're obviously a good writer as you realise that despite how many people do it, a mature reader does not want to sit through 50 chapters of filler, and I think your decision to skip through a lot of the time Maggie and Finn spent apart was a wise one, despite what immature 12 year olds may think.
And at the end of the day, when you put the rating as mature, that's what people should expect (the A/N with the 'love canal' reference had me doubled over); and to be fairly honest, you handled the sex scenes very well indeed, with none of the silly little angsty trysts that I read about so often on this site.
I was actually quite pleased that you lived up to the 'graphic content' label, as I read fiction with 'graphic content' in for a reason- GIVE ME MY GRAPHIC CONTENT DAMNIT.
I haven't checked your profile out yet so I have no idea if you've written anything else, but I'll be watching this story with a VERY beady eye from now on, as well as adding you and Addicted to my favourites list ;)
Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of work! I just hope the lack of responses (everyone can't brain, they obviously have the dumb) doesn't put you off from writing more!
Leah.
86c0rvida3First, let me just say - OH MY FUCKING GOD!
I read ALL of this story today, I just sat reading it -totally engrosses- smoking my like a demon!
I cannot fathom why your story hasn't gained more responses, you truly are a fucking amazing writer and I'm sad to see that this story hasn't been updated in a while.
And just to touch upon something that a lot of people seem to have a problem with- why is the drugs thing such a crisis? I thought that it added a fantastic dash of realism into a story that surrounds things that we see as being totally unreal; surely that should be something you should be commended for? It certainly is in my eyes, pet!
As I said before, I was totally engrossed- I only found like THREE typos, and your grasp of language is very good. I think I can honestly say that this is the BEST piece of fiction I've ever read on this site, I really, truly did enjoy it. There wasn't one point where I thought 'Oh, it's starting to lose it now', not once did my attention waver.
In fact, I even found it hard to STOP reading, hence the zombie that was me today, sat ignoring my boyfriend while I read this amazing story :P (was totally worth it, words cannot comprehend how much I enjoyed this)
Also, and this is a feat for a writer as I RARELY ever do this, but I cried quite a few times while I read this; you captured Maggie's misery perfectly, and while Finn had his distractions, you did likewise for him.
Again, something that seems to irk everyone else, I thought the time-skips were refreshing. You're obviously a good writer as you realise that despite how many people do it, a mature reader does not want to sit through 50 chapters of filler, and I think your decision to skip through a lot of the time Maggie and Finn spent apart was a wise one, despite what immature 12 year olds may think.
And at the end of the day, when you put the rating as mature, that's what people should expect (the A/N with the 'love canal' reference had me doubled over); and to be fairly honest, you handled the sex scenes very well indeed, with none of the silly little angsty trysts that I read about so often on this site.
I was actually quite pleased that you lived up to the 'graphic content' label, as I read fiction with 'graphic content' in for a reason- GIVE ME MY GRAPHIC CONTENT DAMNIT.
I haven't checked your profile out yet so I have no idea if you've written anything else, but I'll be watching this story with a VERY beady eye from now on, as well as adding you and Addicted to my favourites list ;)
Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of work! I just hope the lack of responses (everyone can't brain, they obviously have the dumb) doesn't put you off from writing more!
Leah.
12/8/2009 c22 90lovelaced
I absolutely love this story! At first I wasn't sure about it when Maggie started getting into the drugs and then the five year jump happened, but I realized that people change and people change dramatically when there's pain in their life. I'm loving how it all turned out and I'm glad that they're finally together again! You're a great writer, keep it up.
-Steph
90lovelacedI absolutely love this story! At first I wasn't sure about it when Maggie started getting into the drugs and then the five year jump happened, but I realized that people change and people change dramatically when there's pain in their life. I'm loving how it all turned out and I'm glad that they're finally together again! You're a great writer, keep it up.
-Steph
12/4/2009 c22 Guest
Please update soon! I'm dieing to know
how this is going to end. I love how your
writing is drastic, raw, and just straight to the point.
Please update soon! I'm dieing to know
how this is going to end. I love how your
writing is drastic, raw, and just straight to the point.
11/27/2009 c22 13blurrylights
This is SO good so far! I really hope that you do update soon...it's a gorgeous story, and excellently written. :P
13blurrylightsThis is SO good so far! I really hope that you do update soon...it's a gorgeous story, and excellently written. :P
11/26/2009 c11 Anne
Hi, just opened up your story, and it's wonderful so far. Keep it up with your updates!
Hi, just opened up your story, and it's wonderful so far. Keep it up with your updates!
11/21/2009 c22 Chocorange888
Thank you so much for the story, at first I honestly thought that this was going to be another cliched story, but at least well written. But after a while, I finally realised how wrong I was, because of the emotions which it provoked in me as well. I could almost feel how Maggie did, her intense pain and dispair; this isn't something that happens often. Well done and thanks once again for your effort.
Thank you so much for the story, at first I honestly thought that this was going to be another cliched story, but at least well written. But after a while, I finally realised how wrong I was, because of the emotions which it provoked in me as well. I could almost feel how Maggie did, her intense pain and dispair; this isn't something that happens often. Well done and thanks once again for your effort.