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8/26/2009 c22 3Ruby Sue
Great chapter, as usual but I have to admit it wasn't what I wanted their reunion to be like. It was far too much about sex (not that you can ever have too much sex) but, is that all their relationship is based on? What about the whole abandonment issue and erasing her memory stuff, that barely came up at all! I get that they're both super horny after not having each other all this time so I'm glad we got the fucking out of the way but I'm hoping in the next chapter you have a bit more feelings/emotions, as boring as that may be I think its necessary. Plus she's a totally different person, if their relationship really is only based on sex it wouldn't matter but if it's on emotion I'm thinking they'll have some big road bumps coming up. But I loved the chapter nonetheless, I just wasn't a big fan of sex.
8/26/2009 c22 curator
Yay! Together at last!
8/26/2009 c22 heather.is.epic
intense I like I will await more
8/25/2009 c22 4Winter Evoleht
I expected this chapter to have a lot more emotion and less of straight out fucking.

But it was still good.

Looking forward to the next chapters!
8/25/2009 c22 1R0CKER
I've been an awful reviewer lately...I was on vacation, had to move in for school, started school, blah blah blah. But anyways this was the best written chapter! Great job and can't believe that the story is almost over!
8/25/2009 c22 2Meg Wren
i don't think i have ever been this excited for an update the entire time i've read stories on fictionpress, and you definatly lived up to my expectations. can't wait for the next installment!
8/25/2009 c22 2Believe-In-Faeries
OOH! nice reunion =] im glad they are back together. wonder what happens to sylas and how Mags reacts to Finns world now that he rules. update soon please =P
8/25/2009 c22 Brooke
It would be AMAZING if Maggie had Finn's child(:
8/25/2009 c22 Chronically Creative
Hot damn, that was great. I love the change in Maggie, but don't change her too much. If Finn still loves her, there's a reason for that. If you change her completely, then he's only in love with the memory of her older self...which is very disappointing. Well, you did well in this chapter, just saying for future reference. Update soon! :)
8/25/2009 c22 1BreeBelle
Let me just say that this was a BEE-YOO-TEE-FULL chapter! Their reunion was so sweet and it totally didn't sound like some trashy, cliche romance novel. I'm so glad Finn rescued Maggie ans that she's healed. But...will we be seeing more of Sylas? Grr, make Finn punch his lights out or something! Can't wait for the next chapter! :D
8/25/2009 c22 1PumaRaw
loved it! please update!
8/25/2009 c22 Kathey27
I'm super glad they're back together! : ) this was great and I cant wait for the next chapter : )
8/25/2009 c20 6Lisa0211
I am sorry about your flame. That was unkind and uncalled for. People have problems and the point of this is to work through them. I think the problem you gave her is very fitting to its cause. I don't like drugs either, but they are the perfect tool in this story.

By the way, you inspired me to write again so i started a new story! w00t!

For constructive criticism I would watch your punctuation, especially comma usage. Also, read aloud to catch the small awkward moments.

But overall, very nice!:)
8/24/2009 c15 1Senna92
i already sent you another review/feedback but...i loved the sex scene! it must've been really awkward for you to write it... i think you need some description here and there... but otherwise it's REALLY GOOD! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK (hope you break your 100 reviews soon!)
8/24/2009 c21 2Meg Wren
i seriously cannot wait for the next chapter!
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