for Innocence and Petulance7/16/2012 c13 DA-chen1
Hey, great chap! I really like the main characters! They are so.. special!
I like that Finn is a powerful man and he knows what he wants!
Mira
Hey, great chap! I really like the main characters! They are so.. special!
I like that Finn is a powerful man and he knows what he wants!
Mira
7/16/2012 c11 DA-chen1
Woah. Why did he have to be such an arrogant a.. Yeah I know, he is a bad bad demon and all, but he did the first step! Gave her his blood! She didn't beg for it...
Mira
Woah. Why did he have to be such an arrogant a.. Yeah I know, he is a bad bad demon and all, but he did the first step! Gave her his blood! She didn't beg for it...
Mira
7/7/2012 c23 
2d4rkd4wn
I must say as tired and fed up as I am with all the weak shit vampire stories out there this tale is fantastic! Very well thought out and executed. Thank you very much for the lovely journey.
2d4rkd4wnI must say as tired and fed up as I am with all the weak shit vampire stories out there this tale is fantastic! Very well thought out and executed. Thank you very much for the lovely journey.
4/25/2012 c1 XXX
Great sex scenes. Also great chemistry. The sex scenes were sizzling!
The plot, too, was nicely developed - but I did have a problem with the delayed "happy ending." While I found Maggie's drug addiction to be realistic & believable enough - it made her less likeable. I mean, why can't she have fought it? Succeeded? Survived on her own terms?
I guess my biggest problem is with Maggie. It's believable that at 18, the innocence (an echo of her innocent 10-year-old self) she had first attracted Finn. But unrecognisable at 23, what does she have going for her? The blood bond? An acceptable answer, but not romantic.
You had excellent chemistry. But the romance was less romantic, and this was Maggie's fault. She's only human, and that's her problem - she has nothing going for her except her supposed beauty and her having charmed Finn at age 10. Strength of character? Her whole "I'm going to be smart & successful" shtick? All gone. The drug abuse was believable. But it made her less likeable in the context of this particular story. All the pain she went through - sure, she is to be pitied. But admired? Empathised with? Nah.
I enjoyed the story nonetheless, but I feel like this is a pretty severe flaw. Any other issues are minor - this is a great read, fast-paced and exciting and intriguing. I hope that my suggestions are helpful rather than insulting.
Great sex scenes. Also great chemistry. The sex scenes were sizzling!
The plot, too, was nicely developed - but I did have a problem with the delayed "happy ending." While I found Maggie's drug addiction to be realistic & believable enough - it made her less likeable. I mean, why can't she have fought it? Succeeded? Survived on her own terms?
I guess my biggest problem is with Maggie. It's believable that at 18, the innocence (an echo of her innocent 10-year-old self) she had first attracted Finn. But unrecognisable at 23, what does she have going for her? The blood bond? An acceptable answer, but not romantic.
You had excellent chemistry. But the romance was less romantic, and this was Maggie's fault. She's only human, and that's her problem - she has nothing going for her except her supposed beauty and her having charmed Finn at age 10. Strength of character? Her whole "I'm going to be smart & successful" shtick? All gone. The drug abuse was believable. But it made her less likeable in the context of this particular story. All the pain she went through - sure, she is to be pitied. But admired? Empathised with? Nah.
I enjoyed the story nonetheless, but I feel like this is a pretty severe flaw. Any other issues are minor - this is a great read, fast-paced and exciting and intriguing. I hope that my suggestions are helpful rather than insulting.
4/25/2012 c23 XXX
Great sex scenes. Also great chemistry. The sex scenes were sizzling!
The plot, too, was nicely developed - but I did have a problem with the delayed "happy ending." While I found Maggie's drug addiction to be realistic & believable enough - it made her less likeable. I mean, why can't she have fought it? Succeeded? Survived on her own terms?
I guess my biggest problem is with Maggie. It's believable that at 18, the innocence (an echo of her innocent 10-year-old self) she had first attracted Finn. But unrecognisable at 23, what does she have going for her? The blood bond? An acceptable answer, but not romantic.
You had excellent chemistry. But the romance was less romantic, and this was Maggie's fault. She's only human, and that's her problem - she has nothing going for her except her supposed beauty and her having charmed Finn at age 10. Strength of character? Her whole "I'm going to be smart & successful" shtick? All gone. The drug abuse was believable. But it made her less likeable in the context of this particular story. All the pain she went through - sure, she is to be pitied. But admired? Empathised with? Nah.
I enjoyed the story nonetheless, but I feel like this is a pretty severe flaw. Any other issues are minor - this is a great read, fast-paced and exciting and intriguing. I hope that my suggestions are helpful rather than insulting.
Great sex scenes. Also great chemistry. The sex scenes were sizzling!
The plot, too, was nicely developed - but I did have a problem with the delayed "happy ending." While I found Maggie's drug addiction to be realistic & believable enough - it made her less likeable. I mean, why can't she have fought it? Succeeded? Survived on her own terms?
I guess my biggest problem is with Maggie. It's believable that at 18, the innocence (an echo of her innocent 10-year-old self) she had first attracted Finn. But unrecognisable at 23, what does she have going for her? The blood bond? An acceptable answer, but not romantic.
You had excellent chemistry. But the romance was less romantic, and this was Maggie's fault. She's only human, and that's her problem - she has nothing going for her except her supposed beauty and her having charmed Finn at age 10. Strength of character? Her whole "I'm going to be smart & successful" shtick? All gone. The drug abuse was believable. But it made her less likeable in the context of this particular story. All the pain she went through - sure, she is to be pitied. But admired? Empathised with? Nah.
I enjoyed the story nonetheless, but I feel like this is a pretty severe flaw. Any other issues are minor - this is a great read, fast-paced and exciting and intriguing. I hope that my suggestions are helpful rather than insulting.