for I Wish6/15/2009 c1 
11Whispers of the Lost
I LOVED this. I especially loved the parentheses in every stanza. It really added alot to the rhythm and the tone. Great emotions, beautiful imagery. I loved the red bull and christmas tree analogies. Great work!
-Sasha
11Whispers of the LostI LOVED this. I especially loved the parentheses in every stanza. It really added alot to the rhythm and the tone. Great emotions, beautiful imagery. I loved the red bull and christmas tree analogies. Great work!
-Sasha
5/22/2009 c1 19The Beautiful Letdown
I think he knows how much you like hom, he just can't believe it... I hope things get better.:)
19The Beautiful LetdownI think he knows how much you like hom, he just can't believe it... I hope things get better.:)
5/21/2009 c1 81BedHead-RedHead
lovely!
'the rush of adrenaline through my veins' was great, followed by a superb 'like a thousand red bulls when you hold my hand'. That was just awsum! (that line made my day!) :)
'The words on the tip of my tongue (i know they'd make you fall in love with me)' Love that line, it uniquely captures the attention. 'that die on my lips when you say "hello". ' Way to end it! yup, it was really well done!
81BedHead-RedHeadlovely!
'the rush of adrenaline through my veins' was great, followed by a superb 'like a thousand red bulls when you hold my hand'. That was just awsum! (that line made my day!) :)
'The words on the tip of my tongue (i know they'd make you fall in love with me)' Love that line, it uniquely captures the attention. 'that die on my lips when you say "hello". ' Way to end it! yup, it was really well done!
5/20/2009 c1 4HighOnBrokenWings
Bitter, yes. But also very well written and relatable :D
"I wish you could smell
The bitter fragrance
Of unrequited love"
Those were very cool lines :)
4HighOnBrokenWingsBitter, yes. But also very well written and relatable :D
"I wish you could smell
The bitter fragrance
Of unrequited love"
Those were very cool lines :)
5/20/2009 c1 166listen to what i've never said
Holy Macaroni I love this! It's beautiful and deep and I just love it :) Great job
166listen to what i've never saidHoly Macaroni I love this! It's beautiful and deep and I just love it :) Great job