for A Change of Blood6/6/2009 c4 
5incognitus
Hey looks like your story has great potential for development. I really like the overall plot (based on the summary and the chapters posted so far) and how you're giving your own version of vampirism that isn't overly cliched. In terms of writing style, perhaps you might want to incorporate more descriptive details and character development rather than relying heavily on conversation? Just a suggestion you might want to consider. Hope you update soon, and nice job so far! =)
5incognitusHey looks like your story has great potential for development. I really like the overall plot (based on the summary and the chapters posted so far) and how you're giving your own version of vampirism that isn't overly cliched. In terms of writing style, perhaps you might want to incorporate more descriptive details and character development rather than relying heavily on conversation? Just a suggestion you might want to consider. Hope you update soon, and nice job so far! =)