for one night alone5/28/2009 c1 luv me like no other
These are my favorite lines:
the misery of being single, alone, lonely, not good enough,
for that of being taken, alone, lonely, not good enough.
i really like how well you convey the emotions in this poem.
These are my favorite lines:
the misery of being single, alone, lonely, not good enough,
for that of being taken, alone, lonely, not good enough.
i really like how well you convey the emotions in this poem.
5/24/2009 c1 
13Shasta Valentine
this poem had so much raw emotion, it was literally breathtaking. very relatable.
-sv
13Shasta Valentinethis poem had so much raw emotion, it was literally breathtaking. very relatable.
-sv
5/24/2009 c1 36Kate Marshall
What I liked best was the sentence arrangment. It was odd because some of the sentences would end in the middle of a line, but I liked it for the poem. It added an interesting, choppy rhythm to the piece. :)
The topic is a little sappy. But it /is/ relatable to, especially since most everyone on FP are girls. So I'm sure many people would appreciate this poem. ;)
Good job!
-Peach/Kate, from the Review Marathon (link's in the profile!)
36Kate MarshallWhat I liked best was the sentence arrangment. It was odd because some of the sentences would end in the middle of a line, but I liked it for the poem. It added an interesting, choppy rhythm to the piece. :)
The topic is a little sappy. But it /is/ relatable to, especially since most everyone on FP are girls. So I'm sure many people would appreciate this poem. ;)
Good job!
-Peach/Kate, from the Review Marathon (link's in the profile!)
5/24/2009 c1 612simpleplan13
"which of us isn't worth what to the other."... the phrasing here is odd
I like this piece. It's very bittersweet and relateable. I also really like the fourth line. That repetition really made a point. The ending was great as well, very true to life.
PS Check out the Review Game and/or Review Marathon (link in my profile)
612simpleplan13"which of us isn't worth what to the other."... the phrasing here is odd
I like this piece. It's very bittersweet and relateable. I also really like the fourth line. That repetition really made a point. The ending was great as well, very true to life.
PS Check out the Review Game and/or Review Marathon (link in my profile)