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5/28/2009 c1 21HennaJuliet
I overall like the tone of her emotions in this piece...

However...I don't think "Christmas Morning" would be on her mind... (I'm assuming your protagonist is of the Jewish faith?)

But I like how she describes the destruction of families in this time period. Very true to life.
5/28/2009 c1 9MagicWords
This was prety good.

The protagonist's thoughts are very realistic and believable. I enjoyed this piece.

Look out for run-on sentences and grammer mistakes. You have quite a few of those and some added periods and commas will help the flow run more smoothly.

Other than that, nicely done.

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