5/28/2009 c1 9Noir Schist
The poem holds an intense sense of reality even when it's spoken mostly in a metaphorical sense, and it's easy to understand the intended meaning. Great job! I loved it.

5/28/2009 c1 50Kristina Suko
I love your poetry, it's so beautiful. Always draws me in!

It's a little choppy, just the shortness of the lines, but that could be fixed if you combine a few of them here and there. :)

I love the imagery.

~Mara