for Shilling Paste7/22/2012 c5 
23plumblossom
The way Andy makes a show of not remembering his classmate's name when he's known her all his life is priceless. What a horrible little boy!
I am looking forward to more.
23plumblossomThe way Andy makes a show of not remembering his classmate's name when he's known her all his life is priceless. What a horrible little boy!
I am looking forward to more.
5/20/2010 c3 4Memme
This is an absolutely amazing story! :( I'm sort of bummed you didn't continue it. Still, it's great what you have. The narrator voice is fantastic; dry, wistful, sarcastic, and hilarious to the outside observer.
Here's hoping there will be more some time in the unforeseen future! I can always hope. ;)
4MemmeThis is an absolutely amazing story! :( I'm sort of bummed you didn't continue it. Still, it's great what you have. The narrator voice is fantastic; dry, wistful, sarcastic, and hilarious to the outside observer.
Here's hoping there will be more some time in the unforeseen future! I can always hope. ;)
10/22/2009 c1 14Long
I enjoyed reading this. For the past few days, I've been doing a lot of thinking. One conclusion I came up with is, people suck. In a cheeky way, maybe it's not so bad.
14LongI enjoyed reading this. For the past few days, I've been doing a lot of thinking. One conclusion I came up with is, people suck. In a cheeky way, maybe it's not so bad.
6/13/2009 c2 1Kneecap
"Even I could tell, in my 13-year-old, self-absorbed way, that my mom was lonely" - I really like that part of the sentence, for some reason. It reminded me of the Catcher in the Rye.
"Lots of lover swapping and who knows what else." - xD, nice.
"I'm better than them, even if they haven't realized it yet." I like how he pretends to be secure, but, as he showed in the last paragraph, he really isn't. You're pretty good at characterisation, really; I've already got a pretty strong feel for what he's like.
And you haven't launched into overly cliched/beautified descriptions of what the characters look like =D.
So, overall, I'm quite happy with this, really ^^. I'm interested in finding out what Jamie's like now =D, and the parents.
1Kneecap"Even I could tell, in my 13-year-old, self-absorbed way, that my mom was lonely" - I really like that part of the sentence, for some reason. It reminded me of the Catcher in the Rye.
"Lots of lover swapping and who knows what else." - xD, nice.
"I'm better than them, even if they haven't realized it yet." I like how he pretends to be secure, but, as he showed in the last paragraph, he really isn't. You're pretty good at characterisation, really; I've already got a pretty strong feel for what he's like.
And you haven't launched into overly cliched/beautified descriptions of what the characters look like =D.
So, overall, I'm quite happy with this, really ^^. I'm interested in finding out what Jamie's like now =D, and the parents.
6/4/2009 c1 Kneecap
Well, you did write something! AT LAST.
I wasn't expecting it to be so short xD. I'm assuming this is an introductory chapter or something? What happened to the Merman one!
Nice title though! I can't say I understand what it's supposed to mean, but hopefully I will do, eventually! And hmm, I'm not sure what to make of this. It's too short for me to really say much. I think I like the tone of the narrator's voice though! He sounds really biased against positivity xD.
Write more =D.
Well, you did write something! AT LAST.
I wasn't expecting it to be so short xD. I'm assuming this is an introductory chapter or something? What happened to the Merman one!
Nice title though! I can't say I understand what it's supposed to mean, but hopefully I will do, eventually! And hmm, I'm not sure what to make of this. It's too short for me to really say much. I think I like the tone of the narrator's voice though! He sounds really biased against positivity xD.
Write more =D.