for The Once Girl5/1/2010 c6 GlowInTheDarkFlipFlops
Wow! Amazing story; the plot is great and the writing is captivating. I can't wait for more!
Wow! Amazing story; the plot is great and the writing is captivating. I can't wait for more!
2/23/2010 c5 PandyMi
Your story is different, I luve it. XD
I LOVE the person, thing, soul inside her. She is totally sick! Cooleto!
But how was the person slash thing slash soul capable of residing within her? Is this person slash thing slash soul kinda like her sub-conscious or something?
Anyhoo, awesome story update soon XD :)
Your story is different, I luve it. XD
I LOVE the person, thing, soul inside her. She is totally sick! Cooleto!
But how was the person slash thing slash soul capable of residing within her? Is this person slash thing slash soul kinda like her sub-conscious or something?
Anyhoo, awesome story update soon XD :)
1/9/2010 c1 Silver77
Um, well...It's written alright and everything, but you do realize that this book/story, whatever, is like EXTREMELY close to Stephenia Meyer's book The Host? In the Host there is "soul" living inside the human girl's body who also talks to her through her head and this sounds like a bit of a copy. If it is intentional, you might want to think about writing on FanFiction instead of FictionPress, because FanFiction is fan fiction on books that exists but with the writer's own twist, which kind of sounds like what you are doing.
Um, well...It's written alright and everything, but you do realize that this book/story, whatever, is like EXTREMELY close to Stephenia Meyer's book The Host? In the Host there is "soul" living inside the human girl's body who also talks to her through her head and this sounds like a bit of a copy. If it is intentional, you might want to think about writing on FanFiction instead of FictionPress, because FanFiction is fan fiction on books that exists but with the writer's own twist, which kind of sounds like what you are doing.
11/11/2009 c2 
20Lonzo
Hm. I am confused. There are two interpretations for this. She's pregnant and the fetus is speaking from within the blackness of the womb (the accident being rape). OR the accident was a physical accident, like a wreck, and her mind has turned against itself... Just... It's confusing. Good though. Lots of detail.Wonderful interaction between... the two halves? Or the mom and kid? I don't know... But it was good.
20LonzoHm. I am confused. There are two interpretations for this. She's pregnant and the fetus is speaking from within the blackness of the womb (the accident being rape). OR the accident was a physical accident, like a wreck, and her mind has turned against itself... Just... It's confusing. Good though. Lots of detail.Wonderful interaction between... the two halves? Or the mom and kid? I don't know... But it was good.
10/30/2009 c2 Meee
Nice. GIVE ME MORE. 50,0 words more, that's right.
Nice. GIVE ME MORE. 50,0 words more, that's right.
5/31/2009 c1 Jane
I really enjoyed this, please update soon!
I really enjoyed this, please update soon!