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8/21/2009 c1 1Chocolate Unicorn
This is cool :)

I read your other story "The Godchild"

I'm liking your work so far. But you only have two flaws.

In this one story you mention the tattoes on his neck at least two times if not more. it's repetive and unnecessary. Next time try and just mention everything you need to mention about it once.

Your second flaw is that you havn't updated! :) Please do that soon.

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