for Red & White2/7/2010 c6 
17FireInsideMyself
o! I like this. I cannot wait to read more. I love the descriptions and the characters are very realistic, which drew me in even more. Love it!
17FireInsideMyselfo! I like this. I cannot wait to read more. I love the descriptions and the characters are very realistic, which drew me in even more. Love it!
8/4/2009 c6 13He Named It Fluffy
Now you need to finish this one! I know I've read anotehr scene fro mit that's not up now!
13He Named It FluffyNow you need to finish this one! I know I've read anotehr scene fro mit that's not up now!
8/4/2009 c6 Martin Baker
Hi! it's Martin Baker from FF, Adrian Richard Utt Baker on this site. Sorry I didn't submit a signed review but my computer's being difficult. I like this. I like the concept of vampires not being what all the glorified stories say they are. The chapters are really short, though. I wish you'd started a little before the attacks so we could get to know Maya a lot better. Like, what is she? A college student, or a worker somewhere? Keep writeing, and I look forward to the next installment.
Hi! it's Martin Baker from FF, Adrian Richard Utt Baker on this site. Sorry I didn't submit a signed review but my computer's being difficult. I like this. I like the concept of vampires not being what all the glorified stories say they are. The chapters are really short, though. I wish you'd started a little before the attacks so we could get to know Maya a lot better. Like, what is she? A college student, or a worker somewhere? Keep writeing, and I look forward to the next installment.
6/25/2009 c5 Shadow Kissed Twilight
Short, sweet and to the point- I like this story so far and am interested to see where it goes.
Please update when you can and be safe.
~Shadow
Short, sweet and to the point- I like this story so far and am interested to see where it goes.
Please update when you can and be safe.
~Shadow
6/24/2009 c4 8summer-insomniac
Another great update! Sorry that it took me a few days to review!
Your characterization of Maya and descriptions of her surroundings are very good; detailed, but not too detailed.
The story is very mysterious so far. You plant questions in the readers' heads that are just hanging there, which creates a great mood for the story.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter, and seeing more of Marco!
8summer-insomniacAnother great update! Sorry that it took me a few days to review!
Your characterization of Maya and descriptions of her surroundings are very good; detailed, but not too detailed.
The story is very mysterious so far. You plant questions in the readers' heads that are just hanging there, which creates a great mood for the story.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter, and seeing more of Marco!
6/20/2009 c4 4willowulf
lol must have been a breakable phone. lovely.
I really like the plot, can't wait for the next chapter.
4willowulflol must have been a breakable phone. lovely.
I really like the plot, can't wait for the next chapter.
6/15/2009 c1 10rougette
Great story!
I would be able to beta for you if you'd like!
PM me if you're interested (:
10rougetteGreat story!
I would be able to beta for you if you'd like!
PM me if you're interested (:
6/13/2009 c2 8summer-insomniac
This is off to an AMAZING start! You have a good balance of showing information and keeping mystery that it's pleasing to the reader, not frustrating. And the shortness of the chapters helps keep an air of suspense and wonder. I can't wait to read more about Maya and Marco! :)
8summer-insomniacThis is off to an AMAZING start! You have a good balance of showing information and keeping mystery that it's pleasing to the reader, not frustrating. And the shortness of the chapters helps keep an air of suspense and wonder. I can't wait to read more about Maya and Marco! :)