for Lonely?6/18/2009 c1 
74Grains and Oats
Honestly, I thought this was rather boring. Haikus are usually for describing things shortly with powerful words and deep meanings behind them, but this was just...bland. It holds barely any emotion. They just feel like empty words, even if they're meant to comfort. Personally, if I was feeling down and you said, "Hey this'll cheer you up!" I would just feel worse because it seems like you put so little effort into it. Just my opinion though.
-.kati
74Grains and OatsHonestly, I thought this was rather boring. Haikus are usually for describing things shortly with powerful words and deep meanings behind them, but this was just...bland. It holds barely any emotion. They just feel like empty words, even if they're meant to comfort. Personally, if I was feeling down and you said, "Hey this'll cheer you up!" I would just feel worse because it seems like you put so little effort into it. Just my opinion though.
-.kati