for Romeo and Juliet in Sarajevo11/28/2009 c1 Klebs
Wow, very sad.
I should have expected that sorta ending
since the title does say Romeo and Juliet
but i had hoped for a twist in the plot.
I can't believe this is a true story.
Sometimes you have to wonder, what on
earth were those two communities/ groups
were thinking.
Very well written.
Wow, very sad.
I should have expected that sorta ending
since the title does say Romeo and Juliet
but i had hoped for a twist in the plot.
I can't believe this is a true story.
Sometimes you have to wonder, what on
earth were those two communities/ groups
were thinking.
Very well written.
6/18/2009 c1 
3Promiscuous Misprocuous
I found the idea much more compelling than the actual story. I understand the constraints having been under similar ones myself at several points in time, but I think that this story might even be more powerfully written if it were to be in first person or in a Last Days of Summer sort of style with newspaper clippings and journal entries.
The title is excellent, but if there could perhaps be more parallels drawn between Romeo and Juliet and your story, it would be a more effective allusion.
Just some suggestions and such. I realize that I don't sound too complimentary, but I don't review stories that I don't like, so consider this a decent work.
3Promiscuous MisprocuousI found the idea much more compelling than the actual story. I understand the constraints having been under similar ones myself at several points in time, but I think that this story might even be more powerfully written if it were to be in first person or in a Last Days of Summer sort of style with newspaper clippings and journal entries.
The title is excellent, but if there could perhaps be more parallels drawn between Romeo and Juliet and your story, it would be a more effective allusion.
Just some suggestions and such. I realize that I don't sound too complimentary, but I don't review stories that I don't like, so consider this a decent work.