for Of Dukes and Peasants4/30/2015 c5 Guest
I just realized how similar this Serena is to the Serena in Sailor Moon
I just realized how similar this Serena is to the Serena in Sailor Moon
4/4/2015 c1 Diamondstream
I absolutely loved your story and your writing-descriptive with humor making this a pleasant and wonderful read. It is really very good and I love your writing style! You have a flair for writing and please don't stop... it is a really entertaining story and plot.
I absolutely loved your story and your writing-descriptive with humor making this a pleasant and wonderful read. It is really very good and I love your writing style! You have a flair for writing and please don't stop... it is a really entertaining story and plot.
3/29/2015 c3 
1Maye Saulog
Reading this in 2015.. I love the beginning but i think you got the date wrong.. It should be 1871 if she's 16 years old, so i was a little confused there. But maybe someone already pointed this out haha. Hope youre still writing!
1Maye SaulogReading this in 2015.. I love the beginning but i think you got the date wrong.. It should be 1871 if she's 16 years old, so i was a little confused there. But maybe someone already pointed this out haha. Hope youre still writing!
2/26/2015 c38 guest
Beautiful :)
Beautiful :)
2/25/2015 c27 16Aretice N. Treader
This chapter seems to be building up to climax really well. There were a couple more simple mistakes, such as changing verb tenses and missing punctuation. Also, there was a sentence that I think could have been worded a little more clearly. "An arm shoved Halter brusquely away from the Countess that his drink sloshed to his well pressed vest." I'm not sure how best to reword it, but something seems a little off. However, this chapter was still great as always. Good job!
16Aretice N. TreaderThis chapter seems to be building up to climax really well. There were a couple more simple mistakes, such as changing verb tenses and missing punctuation. Also, there was a sentence that I think could have been worded a little more clearly. "An arm shoved Halter brusquely away from the Countess that his drink sloshed to his well pressed vest." I'm not sure how best to reword it, but something seems a little off. However, this chapter was still great as always. Good job!
2/13/2015 c26 Aretice N. Treader
I'm actually excited that the romantic aspect of the story is picking up the pace. Usually, I find that authors force their characters into a romantic relationship regardless of the pace of the rest of the story, but you've managed to balance everything well. I love the quality of your writing, although there are the occasional mistakes (such as the verb tense switch somewhere in this chapter), but every writer makes mistakes. I loved this chapter!
I'm actually excited that the romantic aspect of the story is picking up the pace. Usually, I find that authors force their characters into a romantic relationship regardless of the pace of the rest of the story, but you've managed to balance everything well. I love the quality of your writing, although there are the occasional mistakes (such as the verb tense switch somewhere in this chapter), but every writer makes mistakes. I loved this chapter!
2/8/2015 c25 Aretice N. Treader
So Derek's also realizing his feelings... Interesting. I think Derek should have said that he would at least consider Daniel's business proposal, but it can't be helped, I suppose. Also, I haven't heard of coal mills; did you mean coal mines? I could be wrong, and it doesn't change much anyway. I really liked this chapter!
So Derek's also realizing his feelings... Interesting. I think Derek should have said that he would at least consider Daniel's business proposal, but it can't be helped, I suppose. Also, I haven't heard of coal mills; did you mean coal mines? I could be wrong, and it doesn't change much anyway. I really liked this chapter!
2/8/2015 c24 Aretice N. Treader
I wonder if Daniel will make Derek even more jealous, presuming he also pursues Serena. There were a couple of mistakes in this chapter ("you're" instead of "your"). Other than that, this chapter was great!
I wonder if Daniel will make Derek even more jealous, presuming he also pursues Serena. There were a couple of mistakes in this chapter ("you're" instead of "your"). Other than that, this chapter was great!
2/8/2015 c23 Aretice N. Treader
Jeremy just ruined it. I was hoping she'd find out all on her own. Ah, well. I supposed it can't be helped. Jealous Derek is adorable. He acts like a lost puppy. Is Serena's grandfather going to make an appearance soon? Great chapter, by the way!
Jeremy just ruined it. I was hoping she'd find out all on her own. Ah, well. I supposed it can't be helped. Jealous Derek is adorable. He acts like a lost puppy. Is Serena's grandfather going to make an appearance soon? Great chapter, by the way!
2/8/2015 c22 Aretice N. Treader
Doesn't she just have the most unfortunate circumstances? I'm sure Serena will pull through, though. Derek has already noticed her, anywho. Louise's character made me smile. Her pride in her work is something to be admired, I suppose. I enjoyed the calm before the storm.
Doesn't she just have the most unfortunate circumstances? I'm sure Serena will pull through, though. Derek has already noticed her, anywho. Louise's character made me smile. Her pride in her work is something to be admired, I suppose. I enjoyed the calm before the storm.
2/8/2015 c21 Aretice N. Treader
I miss Lord Fallows. He should be a more prominent character, I think. England was a great choice for this story. Not only does it include all of the titles necessary for this story, but it also possesses the type of weather needed. I'm not sure if you chose it for those reasons, though. I knew Derek would grow tired of Victoria. This chapter was good.
I miss Lord Fallows. He should be a more prominent character, I think. England was a great choice for this story. Not only does it include all of the titles necessary for this story, but it also possesses the type of weather needed. I'm not sure if you chose it for those reasons, though. I knew Derek would grow tired of Victoria. This chapter was good.
2/8/2015 c20 Aretice N. Treader
There aren't many mistakes that I haven't pointed out before, though I do think that instead of "traitorous friend" it would be best to write "traitorous fiend," but either way works. I wonder if Victoria is more cunning than she lets on. I liked this chapter. The character development is subtle but amazing.
There aren't many mistakes that I haven't pointed out before, though I do think that instead of "traitorous friend" it would be best to write "traitorous fiend," but either way works. I wonder if Victoria is more cunning than she lets on. I liked this chapter. The character development is subtle but amazing.
2/8/2015 c19 Aretice N. Treader
Victoria's quick to make her move, it seems. I noticed another change in the verb tense, but it's nothing that can't be fixed. I wonder what would happen in an alternate universe, had Serena accepted Alvin's suit. I'm sure Derek would've blown up about without knowing why. This chapter was good.
Victoria's quick to make her move, it seems. I noticed another change in the verb tense, but it's nothing that can't be fixed. I wonder what would happen in an alternate universe, had Serena accepted Alvin's suit. I'm sure Derek would've blown up about without knowing why. This chapter was good.
2/8/2015 c18 Aretice N. Treader
I did like Alexandria acting motherly (or grandmotherly?) toward Derek. It was sweet. And hilarious. I'm glad the news wasn't that someone died, as I originally thought. I'm looking forward to the second half of the story!
I did like Alexandria acting motherly (or grandmotherly?) toward Derek. It was sweet. And hilarious. I'm glad the news wasn't that someone died, as I originally thought. I'm looking forward to the second half of the story!
2/8/2015 c17 Aretice N. Treader
Oh, poor Serena. I have a feeling that Derek will meet Victoria again at the party and choose her over Serena. However, I do believe that Derek will tire of Victoria once he finds out her true motives. I just wanted to point out that you accidentally wrote "the England's..." somewhere in the middle of the chapter. Other than that, this chapter was great!
Oh, poor Serena. I have a feeling that Derek will meet Victoria again at the party and choose her over Serena. However, I do believe that Derek will tire of Victoria once he finds out her true motives. I just wanted to point out that you accidentally wrote "the England's..." somewhere in the middle of the chapter. Other than that, this chapter was great!