7/9/2009 c1 struck03
I like the names, Sir Pansy, Sir Fluffy, Sir Daisy
I love it
and the story was pretty good, but somethings wheren't to my taste, which is fine or the world would have no differences really
I didn't really like the sentence, " She was stunning… stunningly hideous." but that's because I had something like that used on me in my past so everyone else probably won't care and love it
but that's okay
shouldn't the princess be sort of hard to understand too? she doesn't have to be, but it seems like she should too because of the sentence, "He could barely understand what they were saying, as they spoke archaically and Bob..." so you might want to fix that, otherwise good cute story/dream
I like the names, Sir Pansy, Sir Fluffy, Sir Daisy
I love it
and the story was pretty good, but somethings wheren't to my taste, which is fine or the world would have no differences really
I didn't really like the sentence, " She was stunning… stunningly hideous." but that's because I had something like that used on me in my past so everyone else probably won't care and love it
but that's okay
shouldn't the princess be sort of hard to understand too? she doesn't have to be, but it seems like she should too because of the sentence, "He could barely understand what they were saying, as they spoke archaically and Bob..." so you might want to fix that, otherwise good cute story/dream