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12/15/2009 c1 23thinking.about.thinking
Sad, but beautiful. Well done.

12/14/2009 c1 8andsherose
God, that last line is powerful!

For the sake of rhythm, maybe split it, i.e.,

I cannot see you

For lightning or thunder.

I was also thrown off by the 'only' in the second line. It seems sloppy/forced. As a suggestion, maybe try:

But full of lies

Or something like that.

I am quickly becoming a fan of your work, dear. I love them! I hope my reviews help. ^_^

7/4/2009 c1 7Existential Therapy
You know I don't really go for poetry most of the time, but this was really good. Short sweet and too the point, like I like it lol. "...Let go of my sight and see another." That was definately my favorite line, though it was all awsome. It reminds me of a song I heard once. Its called True Romance by Silverstein. If you've never heard it before, it has to do with what your poem was about xD

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