for Bricks11/16/2010 c1 
82steffxnie
Lovely piece. I get the feeling that the narrative persona has half of her mind on other things. Vivid images! :)
82steffxnieLovely piece. I get the feeling that the narrative persona has half of her mind on other things. Vivid images! :)
7/18/2009 c1 45deefective
Loved the imagery in this. It seemed so subtle yet it basically bled through your words at the same time. Also, I loved the fact that you wrote this in first person. It gave it a really personal feel. Nicely done.
- Dee, from the Review Marathon.
[Check it out sometime. Link's in my profile]
45deefectiveLoved the imagery in this. It seemed so subtle yet it basically bled through your words at the same time. Also, I loved the fact that you wrote this in first person. It gave it a really personal feel. Nicely done.
- Dee, from the Review Marathon.
[Check it out sometime. Link's in my profile]
7/2/2009 c1 Isca
I think it's interesting that 'red bricks' would 'uphold' the speaker-as if pain would keep her going. This piece is very original and abstract. :)
I think it's interesting that 'red bricks' would 'uphold' the speaker-as if pain would keep her going. This piece is very original and abstract. :)
6/28/2009 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
More abstract then I’m used to seeing from you. There’s a discourse within it about painting bricks, which in itself is slightly ironic, being that bricks are ‘bricks’ because they already look a certain way.
You then go on to discus the beauty of the body, and forgetting - either beauty, or transfiguring one object/aspect to another. It’s very interesting, it made me think. Keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.
1k+Faithless JulietMore abstract then I’m used to seeing from you. There’s a discourse within it about painting bricks, which in itself is slightly ironic, being that bricks are ‘bricks’ because they already look a certain way.
You then go on to discus the beauty of the body, and forgetting - either beauty, or transfiguring one object/aspect to another. It’s very interesting, it made me think. Keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.
6/28/2009 c1 donxcat
very good. It is well constructed although it sort of leaves me in midair.. but then completing a poem is often the work of the reader. Reviewing poetry is difficult since the same words can have quite different meaning to different reader. This one leaves a lot to the imagination but that might be a good thing. don
very good. It is well constructed although it sort of leaves me in midair.. but then completing a poem is often the work of the reader. Reviewing poetry is difficult since the same words can have quite different meaning to different reader. This one leaves a lot to the imagination but that might be a good thing. don