for Similies1/18/2010 c1 
23fatbird33
very nice. i was afraid that it was going to be cheesy because to be similies often are, but this was not. this was a really intense poem and i loved the last two lines. powerful.
~fatbird:)
23fatbird33very nice. i was afraid that it was going to be cheesy because to be similies often are, but this was not. this was a really intense poem and i loved the last two lines. powerful.
~fatbird:)
7/2/2009 c1 Chasing Skylines
I'd favorite this if it didn't look weird all by its lonesome. :)
I liked the emotion - very powerful, and I liked the realistic, human tone. Easily relateable. I liked the concept, as well, with the similes, and I liked those too. It was ironic, that despite what the summary says, they did well in expressing everything; but then you get to the last line, and all that just empowers it. The rhetorical question just adds to the effect. I also liked the diction, such as the 6th stanza. Out of the similes, I particularly liked this one:
[I feel like a stage actress.
The sets are constantly changing behind me
but I remain static.]
Nice use of the word "static."
Anyway, good job, Bubbles, and I know you write poems to vent, so I hope you feel better.
- Sesshy
I'd favorite this if it didn't look weird all by its lonesome. :)
I liked the emotion - very powerful, and I liked the realistic, human tone. Easily relateable. I liked the concept, as well, with the similes, and I liked those too. It was ironic, that despite what the summary says, they did well in expressing everything; but then you get to the last line, and all that just empowers it. The rhetorical question just adds to the effect. I also liked the diction, such as the 6th stanza. Out of the similes, I particularly liked this one:
[I feel like a stage actress.
The sets are constantly changing behind me
but I remain static.]
Nice use of the word "static."
Anyway, good job, Bubbles, and I know you write poems to vent, so I hope you feel better.
- Sesshy