for The Egyptian Princess Who Told the Knight So8/1/2009 c2 
4Minoan Ferret
This is certainly coming along nicely. Now we have a name for the main character. It's no surprise she doesn't like her father saying it; it's quite a mouthful!
She's an interesting character alright. I don't know what to make of her sometimes. She can be a bit of a meany, and the way she gets through her guards... damn. She seems so cold. But maybe the curse will come back on her somehow one day. Otherwise it wouldn't be much of a curse.
The description, especially of her, is nicely detailed. She sounds beautiful, but her attitude seems quite the opposite. A nice contrast.
Again it left off in a good place. I wonder what her perfect gift could be?
Anyway, good work and keep it up!
4Minoan FerretThis is certainly coming along nicely. Now we have a name for the main character. It's no surprise she doesn't like her father saying it; it's quite a mouthful!
She's an interesting character alright. I don't know what to make of her sometimes. She can be a bit of a meany, and the way she gets through her guards... damn. She seems so cold. But maybe the curse will come back on her somehow one day. Otherwise it wouldn't be much of a curse.
The description, especially of her, is nicely detailed. She sounds beautiful, but her attitude seems quite the opposite. A nice contrast.
Again it left off in a good place. I wonder what her perfect gift could be?
Anyway, good work and keep it up!
7/27/2009 c2 7Insanely Random
Another great chapter! I really love this story and this is the most brilliant chapter yet! This story is truly fantastic, and I love it! Update whenever you can and congratulations on your engagement! I wish you the best!
7Insanely RandomAnother great chapter! I really love this story and this is the most brilliant chapter yet! This story is truly fantastic, and I love it! Update whenever you can and congratulations on your engagement! I wish you the best!
7/27/2009 c1 TreeWhisperer
Awesome! You got me hooked! I wonder, what happened to everyone in the kingdom? And what would the pharaoh do when he found out that the servant was trying to kill his daughter? I guess I'll find out... Anyway, good job and nice cliffhanger! :D
Awesome! You got me hooked! I wonder, what happened to everyone in the kingdom? And what would the pharaoh do when he found out that the servant was trying to kill his daughter? I guess I'll find out... Anyway, good job and nice cliffhanger! :D
7/23/2009 c1 The Blood Red Pen
Odd... but enticing to say teh least. In my opinion this story was very well written and an interesting idea, but the ending was a bit of dissapointment... I want a sequel! *sad face*
Odd... but enticing to say teh least. In my opinion this story was very well written and an interesting idea, but the ending was a bit of dissapointment... I want a sequel! *sad face*
7/8/2009 c1 I-R-Marie
Wow that was really good, I hope there's more. It's a very interesting story. I liked it very mucho.
Wow that was really good, I hope there's more. It's a very interesting story. I liked it very mucho.
7/6/2009 c1 7Insanely Random
This is awesome! I want to see more! I find this to be a truly amazing story and I cannot wait for you to update!
7Insanely RandomThis is awesome! I want to see more! I find this to be a truly amazing story and I cannot wait for you to update!
7/5/2009 c1 4Minoan Ferret
Sorry for the delay in reviewing.
I've never been able to pull off the 1st person perspective myself, but you manage to do it quite well here. The princess does come across as a bit of a stirrer, especially towards her protector, and I couldn't help but think she was pushing him a bit much. Still, trying to kill her's a bit harsh! The perspective works well for the story, and gets across her somewhat spoiled personality. And her protector seems like a bit of a reluctant one, especially since he snaps at her. Maybe she did something else in the past?
The chapter ended with a good cliffhanger too. It leaves a lot unanswered, like what's going to happen to her. (By the way, what's her name? I don't think it was mentioned).
I noticed a couple of spelling and grammar mistakes, but I'm not too picky about them. Re-reading my stuff I notice I seem to leave out letters or whole words...
Hope that feedback was alright.
4Minoan FerretSorry for the delay in reviewing.
I've never been able to pull off the 1st person perspective myself, but you manage to do it quite well here. The princess does come across as a bit of a stirrer, especially towards her protector, and I couldn't help but think she was pushing him a bit much. Still, trying to kill her's a bit harsh! The perspective works well for the story, and gets across her somewhat spoiled personality. And her protector seems like a bit of a reluctant one, especially since he snaps at her. Maybe she did something else in the past?
The chapter ended with a good cliffhanger too. It leaves a lot unanswered, like what's going to happen to her. (By the way, what's her name? I don't think it was mentioned).
I noticed a couple of spelling and grammar mistakes, but I'm not too picky about them. Re-reading my stuff I notice I seem to leave out letters or whole words...
Hope that feedback was alright.
7/2/2009 c1 3cheeselover827
Hey I loved your story it was great i really enjoyed reading it and this one is probally something i will get hooked on! Post soon!
3cheeselover827Hey I loved your story it was great i really enjoyed reading it and this one is probally something i will get hooked on! Post soon!