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12/30/2010 c15 2Olyandther Rae Riley
WOW. this story is awesome..! okei keep writing!
12/30/2010 c9 Olyandther Rae Riley
this part is so sweet! i like this kind of stories...hehe student-teacher kind of stuff. :D
7/30/2010 c1 backtodecember
Wow, a great first chapter. Who would have thought he'd see his student at a strip club, what's more being a stripper. I can't wait to find out what happens next.
5/17/2010 c10 17Unique1952
Aww! Nice!
5/17/2010 c9 Unique1952
Pretty good! I think it's written well my only concern is that their relationshop seems to be moving kinda fast.

Nice work with this chap though!
3/18/2010 c12 2Olyandther Rae Riley
Nice story! I love it. I'm expecting more chapters to come!
2/25/2010 c1 30sophiesix
ooh, great set up! Love how you describe that bar scene, it felt really real and, well awful, but well described and powerful. I now i really feel for Circe (great name by the way), because surely she would have recognised him, and now he's basically run from her - understandably so, but i hope she doesn't take it personally! For CC, really there's not much, but I guess it would be noce to have a bit more development of tehir relationship before teh bar scene, or even in teh park, have him flashback to a time in class or something, rather than just say they were close? That would make it even more powerful. And occasionally teh sentence structures get a bit repetitive, with for eg a lot of sentences starting with I? But thats pretty minor, because i enjoyed it heaps anyway :)
9/7/2009 c8 17Unique1952
very nice!

Sorry I haven't been reading lately, but school has had me occupied.

Nice work with this chapter and the last! The only thing that I see that may need adjusting is that unless I misunderstood something, at the beginning of this chapter, they were at a hotel then later on, you wrote he was leaving her apartment.

Other than that, great work with this! I liked how you ended this chapter too.

Again, good work and I look forward to reading more from you soon!
8/15/2009 c6 DaFatGnome
I really like this story so far. I hope you update soon, and I can't wait for the next chapter.
7/30/2009 c6 Unique1952
More please!

Uh you hd a couple of areas with some puncuation missing like:

(“I cant trust that you wont do what you did again”)

Anyways, great work with this, I can't wait to see what you do with the next chapter!
7/10/2009 c1 hezsha2013
OMG! this story is amazing...

please continue...
7/6/2009 c4 Unique1952
Wowsers, another great chapter.

We really to have similar writing styles! lol

I seriously ldislike Elish...just remember the name Monica in the future. hehe

I see you've been reading Charming, thanks!

Okay, I look forward to reading more of this story soon. Seriously, nice work with this. I really hope Circe moves back in!
7/6/2009 c3 Unique1952
Hey!

And I thought I was Queen Cliffy! lol

...now I see whay people get so mad at cliffys, hmm, maybe I won't do it as much...

Updat...please?...pretty please?

lol

Nice work so far, again, I look forward to seeing what happens next!
7/6/2009 c3 Elesian
no negative comments about this, only positive :)

great chapters & i've added this story to my favorites
7/3/2009 c2 25three.word.lies
this is very cute and i enjoy reading it (: can't wait for updates!
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