for Cloudy with a Chance of Stubble12/23/2009 c1 Neha
Please continue, loving this story!
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Please continue, loving this story!
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7/11/2009 c1 
2xlovexpollutionx
hi you rock.
basically that means i'm telling myself i rock because we're the same person.
i like this idea. except you totes need to mention the whole...ahem...you know. :P
anyway. you are cool. keep it up chica.
2xlovexpollutionxhi you rock.
basically that means i'm telling myself i rock because we're the same person.
i like this idea. except you totes need to mention the whole...ahem...you know. :P
anyway. you are cool. keep it up chica.
7/7/2009 c1 11Caleb Jones
very good start!
well written with great skill, and refreshingly good dialogue.
A few alternating chapters from the boy's perspective would be helpful, they can only meet and update each other once in a while, and there is much to explore for both, like how did he feel about being forced to wear her high heeled shoes, and why did he wear them. did he put on makeup, like his girl friend (and fashion guide) probably did?
I look forward to watching this story bloom and grow!
Keep writing!
11Caleb Jonesvery good start!
well written with great skill, and refreshingly good dialogue.
A few alternating chapters from the boy's perspective would be helpful, they can only meet and update each other once in a while, and there is much to explore for both, like how did he feel about being forced to wear her high heeled shoes, and why did he wear them. did he put on makeup, like his girl friend (and fashion guide) probably did?
I look forward to watching this story bloom and grow!
Keep writing!
7/4/2009 c1 28Crazy Amazing
This is the beginning of what could possibly be a good story :D Only problem though,
"I grabbed the backpack of off the desk"
of off? Or did you mean off of XD
28Crazy AmazingThis is the beginning of what could possibly be a good story :D Only problem though,
"I grabbed the backpack of off the desk"
of off? Or did you mean off of XD