for Jack and the Wolves11/2/2013 c8 Wickedforlife
Good chapter as always.I love your work
Good chapter as always.I love your work
9/29/2012 c23 
1RomanticaKH1
I almost didn't read this through. The beginning seemed dull and a bit repetitive, but then I stuck to it and it got better. When the two packs came together, I honestly laughed quite a lot. The dialogue was just amazing funny to me. Great story, loved it. ;)
1RomanticaKH1I almost didn't read this through. The beginning seemed dull and a bit repetitive, but then I stuck to it and it got better. When the two packs came together, I honestly laughed quite a lot. The dialogue was just amazing funny to me. Great story, loved it. ;)
7/5/2012 c23 2nightshade97
Awesome. I enjoyed reading it and cant wait to read the sequel and see what its all about. If you havent already, you should make a story following up William and Jack and the new pack life in Arizona
2nightshade97Awesome. I enjoyed reading it and cant wait to read the sequel and see what its all about. If you havent already, you should make a story following up William and Jack and the new pack life in Arizona
7/5/2012 c10 nightshade97
Ok your reminders to post reviews crack me up, I love the story, I cant stop laughing.
Ok your reminders to post reviews crack me up, I love the story, I cant stop laughing.
4/14/2011 c23 5Cecily Mitchell
Good story. I like the plot line it was different. A couple of things, the father's name changed a couple of times (you called him Kennedy by mistake) and for the war, you could probably go back and insert the possibility of war in a couple of earlier dinner conversations between the wolves so it doesn't seem to come completely out of thin air. Really good, I'm looking forward to the sequel.
5Cecily MitchellGood story. I like the plot line it was different. A couple of things, the father's name changed a couple of times (you called him Kennedy by mistake) and for the war, you could probably go back and insert the possibility of war in a couple of earlier dinner conversations between the wolves so it doesn't seem to come completely out of thin air. Really good, I'm looking forward to the sequel.
3/6/2011 c23 1do not click
basically i was searching for AGES for a good stroy to read, and i'm so glad i came across this one!
it was great! completely different to normal werewolf vampire storys. Jack becoming a werewolf was such a HUGE twisit, unbelievable! william sounds hot. and i love jack :)
i would read your other one about seth, because i love seth, but since you've only got one chapter and havent updated it since last year, well, is it going to go on? if it does i'd love to read it :)
1do not clickbasically i was searching for AGES for a good stroy to read, and i'm so glad i came across this one!
it was great! completely different to normal werewolf vampire storys. Jack becoming a werewolf was such a HUGE twisit, unbelievable! william sounds hot. and i love jack :)
i would read your other one about seth, because i love seth, but since you've only got one chapter and havent updated it since last year, well, is it going to go on? if it does i'd love to read it :)
8/10/2010 c23 Xandrea
I absolutly loved this story! it was amazing. I couldn't stop reading. I stayed up all night. Its 5:53am now and i think I started around 1am or 2am I'm not sure. I loved it. I can't wait to read the sequel. You are an amazing writer. Don't let anyone tell you differently. Can't wait to read more of your work. Never stop writing. :)
I absolutly loved this story! it was amazing. I couldn't stop reading. I stayed up all night. Its 5:53am now and i think I started around 1am or 2am I'm not sure. I loved it. I can't wait to read the sequel. You are an amazing writer. Don't let anyone tell you differently. Can't wait to read more of your work. Never stop writing. :)
8/4/2010 c12 Last Wish
You know... I never knew her dad was controlling until you mention him to be so in this chapter. It always seemed like she could careless about him besides stuffing food for him to eat every now and then since its her obligation as a daughter to do so.
You know... I never knew her dad was controlling until you mention him to be so in this chapter. It always seemed like she could careless about him besides stuffing food for him to eat every now and then since its her obligation as a daughter to do so.
7/18/2010 c23 DNAstar
what about her friend? and seth i think they should be soul mates that would be cute anyway love the story
what about her friend? and seth i think they should be soul mates that would be cute anyway love the story
6/6/2010 c23 2Abrasive
You're obviously a fan of Twilight.
I am not, however, that didn't stop me from enjoying your story. It was a fun, easy read. That said, there are a few errors, mostly with regards to spelling and the occasional mix-up of a name, particularly Rosaline/Rosemary/Rosalie, whose characterisation needs a bit of work because just feeding the reader a back story about her in order to illustrate the way she is breaks the sacred 'show-don't-tell' rule. More than this, though, I was confused in the first few chapters as to whether the protaganist knew of vampires and werewolves beforehand. At times it seemed she did and at others she didn't. It quite bothered me, actually.
Aside from those small things, as I said, overall not a bad read.
2AbrasiveYou're obviously a fan of Twilight.
I am not, however, that didn't stop me from enjoying your story. It was a fun, easy read. That said, there are a few errors, mostly with regards to spelling and the occasional mix-up of a name, particularly Rosaline/Rosemary/Rosalie, whose characterisation needs a bit of work because just feeding the reader a back story about her in order to illustrate the way she is breaks the sacred 'show-don't-tell' rule. More than this, though, I was confused in the first few chapters as to whether the protaganist knew of vampires and werewolves beforehand. At times it seemed she did and at others she didn't. It quite bothered me, actually.
Aside from those small things, as I said, overall not a bad read.
6/5/2010 c23 Hettiezstar
I thoroughly enjoyed this story!
It's very good, and I like how your protagonist had faults but realised them (or someone made her realise, because no one can realise everything they've done wrong)- she wasn't perfect. It definitely showed her as a stron, brave character and not ~teenyboppery (if you know what a mean) like a werewolf/vampire story can easily turn into.
I love the whole ~soul mate thing, so much!
Oh William! WHAT A HEART-THROB!
He loves Jack so much and that is so adorable ^-^
I also really enjoyed the fact that you included ~the repercussions of her murder- showing that it isn't ~right (of course no one thinks it's right, but some authors tend to run over the bas-ness of it and it's just ~OHILOVEYOUNOMOM~ blegh, it gets tiring)
GAH! It seems a very cut off ending! I can see why you ended it there, with the whole transformation but you just newly included a whole ~war and ~pack factor and I'm GAGGING for more! I want to know what happens when she meets the pack, I want to know who they ARE, I want to know what happens with Diedrick AND SO MUCH MORE!
I do ADORE Seth too, one of my favourite characters :P He's just so...fluffeh! {:
You went just far enough for this to be a perfect T, and it didn't leave me feeling...a bit ~left out~ xD Like some can!
OHJUST WE ALL LOVE TEH SCHMEXY TIME AND NOMNOM
Though...I wouldn't mind further xD (Dirty perv lol xD)
Ayways, I can't wait for the sequel!
You write really well and it will be a joy to read!...and I adore Seth ofc.
LOAD THE SEQUEL REAL SOON! (It's summer now! It's summer now! It's summer now! It's damn hot enfor it .)
Oh and please update here when it's up~ (:
MOARNAO
plzkthnxbai
♥
I thoroughly enjoyed this story!
It's very good, and I like how your protagonist had faults but realised them (or someone made her realise, because no one can realise everything they've done wrong)- she wasn't perfect. It definitely showed her as a stron, brave character and not ~teenyboppery (if you know what a mean) like a werewolf/vampire story can easily turn into.
I love the whole ~soul mate thing, so much!
Oh William! WHAT A HEART-THROB!
He loves Jack so much and that is so adorable ^-^
I also really enjoyed the fact that you included ~the repercussions of her murder- showing that it isn't ~right (of course no one thinks it's right, but some authors tend to run over the bas-ness of it and it's just ~OHILOVEYOUNOMOM~ blegh, it gets tiring)
GAH! It seems a very cut off ending! I can see why you ended it there, with the whole transformation but you just newly included a whole ~war and ~pack factor and I'm GAGGING for more! I want to know what happens when she meets the pack, I want to know who they ARE, I want to know what happens with Diedrick AND SO MUCH MORE!
I do ADORE Seth too, one of my favourite characters :P He's just so...fluffeh! {:
You went just far enough for this to be a perfect T, and it didn't leave me feeling...a bit ~left out~ xD Like some can!
OHJUST WE ALL LOVE TEH SCHMEXY TIME AND NOMNOM
Though...I wouldn't mind further xD (Dirty perv lol xD)
Ayways, I can't wait for the sequel!
You write really well and it will be a joy to read!...and I adore Seth ofc.
LOAD THE SEQUEL REAL SOON! (It's summer now! It's summer now! It's summer now! It's damn hot enfor it .)
Oh and please update here when it's up~ (:
MOARNAO
plzkthnxbai
♥
5/21/2010 c23 BlueRose41
WoW...this story was great!
I started reading it a couple hours ago nd i couldn't stop
This story is gunna b in my favorites :D
Please start the sequal...i cant wait!:)
WoW...this story was great!
I started reading it a couple hours ago nd i couldn't stop
This story is gunna b in my favorites :D
Please start the sequal...i cant wait!:)