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7/15/2009 c1 6The Parisian Guanaco
"One were feelings must hidden"

This line sounded a little strange to me. Did you mean, "One where feelings must be hidden"?

Other than that, it's wonderful. It has a flow to it, and you even managed to make it rhyme! My favorite lines are:

"One w[h]ere we must suffer in silence

As we try to avoid defiance."

Personally, I would never have thought to put 'silence' and 'defiance' into the poem, but it worked out well!
7/13/2009 c1 6As Seen On TV
good poem, generally well written!
7/13/2009 c1 23Amaury
Good job.

The last line puzzles me a little though.

To not quite do?
7/13/2009 c1 26wordsofjade
oh cool, it's like Persuasion almost. :)

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