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7/16/2009 c1 14Aloysius Knight
I like this! Maybe becauses it says a lot to me, maybe because it's so easy to read. I think it is great how you have achieved this rhym - or rhythem - which is easy to remember and makes each 'thing' that you want, feel or need etc..., seem as if it's precious. You make me feel as if I need these thigs, even if I do already have them.

But a tip for you don't put the dashes before each line, put spaces insted. I found the lines distracting.

Wicked work! :)

(Sorry if spelling is bad or punctuation wrong).

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