9/30/2013 c1 9Moon Prynces
I love this story and I love these two characters and I love their interaction. I love that you can almost see their growth.

The writing style for this was perfect – in that he admitted things to himself that he wouldn’t say out loud, and thoughts rambled and fizzled out, and there were all these implications to be read in-between the lines of what they said to each other.

I like that you didn't even give them names, so it was somehow more personal. It didn't take away focus with them groaning or calling out to each other with the other's name – which is sometimes just a cop-out in dialogue.

It was kind of amazing to see who this guy was though. Like, you said he was called a pretty boy in his teens, and it seems maybe he actually used that to get by a bit. But then he just got sick of it and wanted to be seen as someone tough and rough and "manly" so he built up this persona of not caring too much about anyone but himself or getting too touchy-feely with people – especially women. But then he can't help that he cares so much about the female lead and it shows in how certain words escape his mouth and the way they sound and how he looks at her. It kind of makes a person get warm just thinking about it. Even though he is consciously trying to be an ass and unreliable and stay away from commitment...he just can't stop himself from feeling the way he does or saying or doing some things. I like how he's so charming that he slips right into her house and knows he'll be forgiven.

And I absolutely loved the female lead. She was amazing. She wasn't as predictable and dramatic as I keep reading girls to be. She was so much more laid-back and cool about him having done this to her so many times before. She is still indignant and upset with him, but not hysterically so. This is kind of the person I am now, actually. It's why I loved her so much – I could relate to her behavior in so many ways! I love that as much as he's trying to be a badboy and it interferes with their budding relationship...she's still dating him. I mean, he was late to practically half their dates in the two months they've been going out and she still makes plans with him? That's amazing. I mean, I think I would've given up after the first time. But it seems she likes him just as much as he likes her. He keeps doing stupid things and then becoming apologetic while she lets his callous actions slide off her (to some extent) and kind of accepts his self-destructive ways. They kind of seem to balance each other out, and he wants to be better than this for her.

There was so much adorable-ness – I couldn't pick out all my favorites. I mean, one of the things that sticks with us is when he goes to admit he doesn't love her and the floundering, weird conversation this prompts as she calls him a freak. And then there's the actual admission of love. The lead-up to that was amazing. I love how he finally just gives in and says it, but still holding back a bit because his words are "I think I might" instead of being so confident in it.

And I love the connection between flowers in here. Mentioning tulips and daisies and then the pansy – of course not the flower though. And those in-between lines like "a way that sounded like no more redheads and I'm coming early next time and something else he wasn't quite ready to admit to yet". There were so many of those amazing in-between lines like that...

The story and characters and jumbled up thought processes of the characters was real and natural. There wasn't too much analyzing of thoughts or feelings or actions – though the guy was trying really hard to maintain his badboy image while coming to terms with his relationship and how he felt about her.

I feel like this story was different than most other romance stories on the site. It wasn't as conventional, you didn't start from the very beginning of the relationship, they're not high school students, and there was actual character development in here that I could see.

Anyway, I think the only thing I found weird was...what was going on with the ellipses? And maybe you should have used the dash in places where you used the hyphen. But maybe that's more a personal preference for me...

Whatever that was great and I only wish there was more to read about this couple. But then that might be overkill. Still, they are so damn interesting and intriguing and makes a person want more! But thanks for the read, nevertheless!

xoxo

8/8/2012 c1 3Misty Jane
I adore this story so much. It fills me up with such fuzzy fluffiness that I feel like I'm going to explode. I love reading guy POVs, but often times I'm never really satisfied. This story though... I just want to grab Mr. Pansy Guy and give him a bear hug and keep him forever.

You are amazing, and I love you for writing this.

Jane

4/29/2012 c1 8theKnobblyKneedWriter
God I loved this :)

9/22/2011 c1 13youngin-matomon
Is it possible to fall in love after a few reads? Because that's what happened.

After just reading three (! I KNOW! THREE!) oneshots by you, I'm in love with your writing. Please inform your writing and your stories that I *may* have a ring hiding up my sleeve. Or in my pocket. Or in my shoe. I'm not saying.

And it might take a bit longer to see that ring (there might not be one!) come out. ;) ;)

That's a hint that I'm gonna keep reading your oneshots btw :P

2/13/2011 c1 MelikaCalva
I LOVED THIS!

9/28/2010 c1 2elma
I like his character too :)

quite hilarious. i felt like it moved a little quickly- she's a bit too forgiving? but maybe she's just like that.. we'll never know.

i reviewed! my conscience is at ease now haha

3/31/2010 c1 Kajal
Cutest oneshot ever! Love him! Wish you'd turn this into a story because his character would be so fun. He's totally channeling me when I'm in denial which is always.