for We Feel8/15/2010 c1 Prainey Boy
Louie likes the peaches one. Real nice, I like the flow of the whole thing :)
Louie likes the peaches one. Real nice, I like the flow of the whole thing :)
6/10/2010 c1 
12lianoid
Scissors are so sharp.
Do not ever run with them.
My eye has come out.
-Dang. That one caught me by surprise.
Hate myself always.
Knife plunges in and I bleed.
It feels way too good.
-Double dang. I love the last line especially.
This was a really interesting piece overall. The fact that you included several topics and then wrote a few lines about them was pretty neat. I don’t know how to take it as whole though, but then again, I’m terrible with poetry. Ha-ha. Wait, looking back these are haikus right? (I’m so dense sometimes). That explains why I don’t completely get it. Free verse I’m alright with. Rhyming I can do. Haikus? Goodbye. Ha-ha. I couldn’t write a haiku to save my life, I’m afraid. So now I’m super impressed that you cranked out so many. Excellent work Ran. –thumbs up–
12lianoidScissors are so sharp.
Do not ever run with them.
My eye has come out.
-Dang. That one caught me by surprise.
Hate myself always.
Knife plunges in and I bleed.
It feels way too good.
-Double dang. I love the last line especially.
This was a really interesting piece overall. The fact that you included several topics and then wrote a few lines about them was pretty neat. I don’t know how to take it as whole though, but then again, I’m terrible with poetry. Ha-ha. Wait, looking back these are haikus right? (I’m so dense sometimes). That explains why I don’t completely get it. Free verse I’m alright with. Rhyming I can do. Haikus? Goodbye. Ha-ha. I couldn’t write a haiku to save my life, I’m afraid. So now I’m super impressed that you cranked out so many. Excellent work Ran. –thumbs up–
8/3/2009 c1 Fleur-de-lis Evans
This collection of haikus flows well. Each idea seems to flow into the next without a gasp.
The most moving one is 'Cheater' and my favorite is 'Fly'.
Kudos on a great collection
This collection of haikus flows well. Each idea seems to flow into the next without a gasp.
The most moving one is 'Cheater' and my favorite is 'Fly'.
Kudos on a great collection