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7/30/2009 c1 15Mom's Mistake
wow this is one of my favourites. not much else to say. great job. I do wonder, though, where do you get your inspiration?
7/29/2009 c1 28howdylv08
That was so screwed up! (In a good way for the author, but not for the character :D) That made me so sad :( I wish someone would have visited Amelia... :( I noticed a few things:

-"...as to ease whatever it was that obviously upsetting her." Change 'upsetting' to 'upset'

-"...look into her chocolate orbs that tears were still clung to." Remove the 'were'

-"Well it seems that somehow or another managed to break out of a window..." Put 'she' between 'another' and 'managed'

But the rest was amazing! I really like the way you develop stories and relationships and characters. You do an amazing job. Maybe instead of getting all these little (actually, quite large) reviews, I could Beta-Read for you? Just to catch the little mistakes early... Just a thought...

Fantastic!

Sophie :3
7/28/2009 c1 2MartinIsMyGoldfish
Wow! I really loved this and I wish that you would expand it into a full story! This makes for a very creepy and very cool ending, but it could also make for an awesome beginning to a story . . . where does Amelia go? What does Anthony do about it?

I noticed a few grammatical things (sorry, can't help it):

"You're own brother said that?" - should be "YOUR own brother said that?"

*Commas are used before quotation marks, not periods:

"I know." he whispered admitting defeat in her. "But, I can get you out of here." he then offered.

- "I know," he whispered, admitting defeat in her. "But I can get you out of here," he then offered."

Also a few spelling errors, nothing major.

I would really like to see more of this, it's such a great start!
7/28/2009 c1 12Broken-Angel-1994
If this is the end, then you should write the beginning! So, she's crazy? I'd like to read more if you post some!
7/25/2009 c1 1VampireAcademyDB
I agree! you should make this into a story.. it's really sad :"( n i'd like to know anthony and amelia more
7/25/2009 c1 6The Parisian Guanaco
Oh my gosh, that's awful! How sad. =( I feel terrible for Amelia... It was a really good passage, though. If this is only the very end, you should write the whole thing! It would be really good, I'm sure.

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