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10AngelicExistence101
Well, I have to say that this story is amazing and has captivated me since the beginning. I just love the whole storyline between all four main characters and I also love Trixxi's brothers too lol. Just do whatever make you happy, I'm personally not complaining about the length of time between chapters, and y'know why? Because I know that whenever you do update, it's awesome. Besides, good things come to those who wait. ;)
10AngelicExistence101Well, I have to say that this story is amazing and has captivated me since the beginning. I just love the whole storyline between all four main characters and I also love Trixxi's brothers too lol. Just do whatever make you happy, I'm personally not complaining about the length of time between chapters, and y'know why? Because I know that whenever you do update, it's awesome. Besides, good things come to those who wait. ;)
3/14/2010 c5 1xXliarliarXx
I love the story~! Still reading! :D
Check out my supernatural/romance story When The Sun Goes Down.
1xXliarliarXxI love the story~! Still reading! :D
Check out my supernatural/romance story When The Sun Goes Down.
3/10/2010 c9 10AngelicExistence101
Aw! The dialogue is so cute in the chapter and I love the distinct behaviors of Polly and Phoenix. They're so adorable. =P Well, this was a great chapter and I cannot wait for the next one!
10AngelicExistence101Aw! The dialogue is so cute in the chapter and I love the distinct behaviors of Polly and Phoenix. They're so adorable. =P Well, this was a great chapter and I cannot wait for the next one!
11/27/2009 c8 AngelicExistence101
I like the slight cliff hanger at the end of this chapter. I liked it a lot. I went to review your last chapter and my computer said I already did so I apologize for that. Anyways, I think this chapter was great! I mean that. Well, I'll just be here, waiting patiently for more. =)
I like the slight cliff hanger at the end of this chapter. I liked it a lot. I went to review your last chapter and my computer said I already did so I apologize for that. Anyways, I think this chapter was great! I mean that. Well, I'll just be here, waiting patiently for more. =)
8/26/2009 c6 AngelicExistence101
Aha I know how that feels! Ugh! lol. My computer is a dinosaur and I went to save my document on here and it froze. Then I lost all the changes I had made. I was so mad lol. I'm working on a story on here, but it's moving kind of slow I guess you could say lol. Right, anyways... your review.
I love how similar Trixxi and Chet are feeling, even Phoenix and Polly. I'm kind of hoping that Phoenix and Polly will hook up, he's going on about how different from the other girls she is and I really think he does feel that connection. It might just be a connection that will help Phoenix calm his wild ways. While this is interesting, this Rad guy showed up to the party. I wonder if Poenix will get a little jealous? Hm.. lol maybe. Okay, well, I love how pretty Trixxi looks tonight! I can understand how Chet feels about the whole more pressure on him thing but I'm sure Trixxi doesn't mind how sweet and laid back he is. He's not into the not-so-great activities that the other people his age are into, which is great and I applaud him for it. I just hope that he and Trixxi can somehow be together but I'm sure that will come along, sooner or later.
Well, I loved this chapter, I love the story and I cannot wait for more!
Aha I know how that feels! Ugh! lol. My computer is a dinosaur and I went to save my document on here and it froze. Then I lost all the changes I had made. I was so mad lol. I'm working on a story on here, but it's moving kind of slow I guess you could say lol. Right, anyways... your review.
I love how similar Trixxi and Chet are feeling, even Phoenix and Polly. I'm kind of hoping that Phoenix and Polly will hook up, he's going on about how different from the other girls she is and I really think he does feel that connection. It might just be a connection that will help Phoenix calm his wild ways. While this is interesting, this Rad guy showed up to the party. I wonder if Poenix will get a little jealous? Hm.. lol maybe. Okay, well, I love how pretty Trixxi looks tonight! I can understand how Chet feels about the whole more pressure on him thing but I'm sure Trixxi doesn't mind how sweet and laid back he is. He's not into the not-so-great activities that the other people his age are into, which is great and I applaud him for it. I just hope that he and Trixxi can somehow be together but I'm sure that will come along, sooner or later.
Well, I loved this chapter, I love the story and I cannot wait for more!
8/15/2009 c5 AngelicExistence101
I enjoy every chapter you write so it's not surprising that I liked this one too. ^^ I really love "getting to know" characters and thier pasts, it paints a different, clearer picture of that character, like who they are and why they've become that way. Well, anyways, I loved this chapter and I cannot wait for more!
I enjoy every chapter you write so it's not surprising that I liked this one too. ^^ I really love "getting to know" characters and thier pasts, it paints a different, clearer picture of that character, like who they are and why they've become that way. Well, anyways, I loved this chapter and I cannot wait for more!
8/5/2009 c4 AngelicExistence101
Good things come to those who wait ;) So that's what I'm going to do lol. I love how Indie and Disco are getting along with one another, so far lol. I loved how Polly mistook Phoenix for Chet lol. Now I'm extremely excited to read about Tyler's party, I can't wait!
Ooh, I also wanted to say that the whole 'Cradle to Grave' thing was so cute.
Anyways, I really can't wait to read more of this excellent story. :)
Good things come to those who wait ;) So that's what I'm going to do lol. I love how Indie and Disco are getting along with one another, so far lol. I loved how Polly mistook Phoenix for Chet lol. Now I'm extremely excited to read about Tyler's party, I can't wait!
Ooh, I also wanted to say that the whole 'Cradle to Grave' thing was so cute.
Anyways, I really can't wait to read more of this excellent story. :)
8/2/2009 c3 AngelicExistence101
First of all, I have a hard time naming chapters myself but I love the fact that they're all named after a song's lyrics. That is soo cool! :) Oh, I always love Chet and Trixxi's awkwardness but something's getting under my skin about this Rad guy. I can't help but to think that he definitely dangers Chet's chances at being with Trixxi. Hm... well I can't wait for more of this excellent story! =)
First of all, I have a hard time naming chapters myself but I love the fact that they're all named after a song's lyrics. That is soo cool! :) Oh, I always love Chet and Trixxi's awkwardness but something's getting under my skin about this Rad guy. I can't help but to think that he definitely dangers Chet's chances at being with Trixxi. Hm... well I can't wait for more of this excellent story! =)
7/29/2009 c2 atl.wtk
I love this chapter to! hopefully dillion doesnt cause a problem between chet and trixxi cause they really need to get to together. anywayys i love this book so far. keep writing please!
I love this chapter to! hopefully dillion doesnt cause a problem between chet and trixxi cause they really need to get to together. anywayys i love this book so far. keep writing please!
7/29/2009 c2 10AngelicExistence101
Okay, um there's a couple grammatical mistakes here and there. Just watch out for your past and present tenses, they're tricky.
One thing I tend to notice is some of the punctuation is a bit out of it.
For example:
“Oh, about ten in that one,” she pointed to the box at her feet. “But I haven’t started on that one yet,”
It should be this (at least in my opinion):
“Oh, about ten in that one,” She pointed to the box at her feet. “But I haven’t started on that one yet.”
Just slight errors like that. Nothing big though, I don't necessarily mind the italics at all. ^^ I do really, really like this story a lot. Aha I love this Pheonix character, he sounds quite interesting. I find it cute how he found the kitten though. :) Anyways, yeah, I can't wait for the next chapter? I'm also really curious about this party too. Hm. Well, not much more to say besides I love it!
10AngelicExistence101Okay, um there's a couple grammatical mistakes here and there. Just watch out for your past and present tenses, they're tricky.
One thing I tend to notice is some of the punctuation is a bit out of it.
For example:
“Oh, about ten in that one,” she pointed to the box at her feet. “But I haven’t started on that one yet,”
It should be this (at least in my opinion):
“Oh, about ten in that one,” She pointed to the box at her feet. “But I haven’t started on that one yet.”
Just slight errors like that. Nothing big though, I don't necessarily mind the italics at all. ^^ I do really, really like this story a lot. Aha I love this Pheonix character, he sounds quite interesting. I find it cute how he found the kitten though. :) Anyways, yeah, I can't wait for the next chapter? I'm also really curious about this party too. Hm. Well, not much more to say besides I love it!
7/27/2009 c1 4k.maag
Nice story with a title and a description that pop.
Positives:
1. The story has nice transitions that allow for easy reading.
2. The story is different, so the plot is more intriguing.
3. The style of the story works well.
Suggestions for improvement:
1. If you're going to write about indie music, do research. I'm not the type to really chastise you, but I know people who would have coronaries if somebody said Coldplay, Hellogoodbye, and Relient K were indie music in front of them. Brand New is somewhat acceptable, but only if the people in question are or were emo.
2. Make sure your characters develop after the introduction. I know you've probably thought about this already, but I can't stress enough that good characters have flaws and strengths. Nuances are everything.
Thank you for writing this story. I like reading stories that leave room for good critiquing.
4k.maagNice story with a title and a description that pop.
Positives:
1. The story has nice transitions that allow for easy reading.
2. The story is different, so the plot is more intriguing.
3. The style of the story works well.
Suggestions for improvement:
1. If you're going to write about indie music, do research. I'm not the type to really chastise you, but I know people who would have coronaries if somebody said Coldplay, Hellogoodbye, and Relient K were indie music in front of them. Brand New is somewhat acceptable, but only if the people in question are or were emo.
2. Make sure your characters develop after the introduction. I know you've probably thought about this already, but I can't stress enough that good characters have flaws and strengths. Nuances are everything.
Thank you for writing this story. I like reading stories that leave room for good critiquing.
7/27/2009 c1 10AngelicExistence101
That was a really nice, intriguing beginning. I loved how Trixxi and Chet met up as well, it was really cute and sincere of her to help him. She could have just stood there and laughed at him if the boxes collapsed. She didn't. I also really liked his nervousness.
I'm sure you can tell that I really like this and that I can't wait to read more lol. :)
10AngelicExistence101That was a really nice, intriguing beginning. I loved how Trixxi and Chet met up as well, it was really cute and sincere of her to help him. She could have just stood there and laughed at him if the boxes collapsed. She didn't. I also really liked his nervousness.
I'm sure you can tell that I really like this and that I can't wait to read more lol. :)