for Cheer for Me8/28/2009 c3 
1xtheonlyonex
Well, I just wanted to say that I love your stories, and I'll be really sad if you stop posting stories here. I'll totally respect your decision, because being plagiarized would be a horrible thing to have to go through. If you do stop posting here please start posting in livejournal! I haven't gotten added yet, but hopefully I will so I can continue to read your stories. Oh, and btw, they approved you, you are on the list of people who they approved, but didn't click the "Join Community" button at the top of the page. I'm not sure if you knew this or not, so I thought I'd just give you a heads up! Anyways, good luck with your writing, and I really hope you don't get plagiarized. Hopefully fictionpress will change their site so you can't copy and paste any longer. I know that it can be done, so hopefully fictionpress starts doing it. Anyways, love your story and keep writing!
1xtheonlyonexWell, I just wanted to say that I love your stories, and I'll be really sad if you stop posting stories here. I'll totally respect your decision, because being plagiarized would be a horrible thing to have to go through. If you do stop posting here please start posting in livejournal! I haven't gotten added yet, but hopefully I will so I can continue to read your stories. Oh, and btw, they approved you, you are on the list of people who they approved, but didn't click the "Join Community" button at the top of the page. I'm not sure if you knew this or not, so I thought I'd just give you a heads up! Anyways, good luck with your writing, and I really hope you don't get plagiarized. Hopefully fictionpress will change their site so you can't copy and paste any longer. I know that it can be done, so hopefully fictionpress starts doing it. Anyways, love your story and keep writing!
8/26/2009 c4 MarieAnn
I'm really excited for the next chapter. It'll be funny to read how boys will try to kiss Aubrey. I really liked that James got a flower for Aubrey as his way of saying sorry. It was sweet.
A small mistake I noticed: "...thinking about the one gave it." - You forgot to add 'who' in between 'one' and 'gave.'
Update soon!
I'm really excited for the next chapter. It'll be funny to read how boys will try to kiss Aubrey. I really liked that James got a flower for Aubrey as his way of saying sorry. It was sweet.
A small mistake I noticed: "...thinking about the one gave it." - You forgot to add 'who' in between 'one' and 'gave.'
Update soon!
8/26/2009 c3 MarieAnn
Good chapter! I liked the cafeteria scene and with James almost "stealing" her first kiss. Can't wait to read more. :-)
Good chapter! I liked the cafeteria scene and with James almost "stealing" her first kiss. Can't wait to read more. :-)
8/24/2009 c4 1DuchessYappingDog
Ah! I like both of them. I think both are pretty cool dudes. I can't say yet... Must read more. :| I wonder how Keegan and Hazel are doing. I wonder if Audrey will get attacked more this week, hahaha.
1DuchessYappingDogAh! I like both of them. I think both are pretty cool dudes. I can't say yet... Must read more. :| I wonder how Keegan and Hazel are doing. I wonder if Audrey will get attacked more this week, hahaha.
8/24/2009 c4 Kjersti
I think this story is great. The plot is a bit cliché, but at the same time you write it in a way that makes it okay - it's like Audrey *knows* that she's living a cliché.
I do like James and Keegan, even if I think James should drop the "I'm invulnerable and not caring"-act. And is Keegan starting to like Audrey..?
Can't wait to read more. Especially after what that ending sort of promised... :D
I think this story is great. The plot is a bit cliché, but at the same time you write it in a way that makes it okay - it's like Audrey *knows* that she's living a cliché.
I do like James and Keegan, even if I think James should drop the "I'm invulnerable and not caring"-act. And is Keegan starting to like Audrey..?
Can't wait to read more. Especially after what that ending sort of promised... :D
8/23/2009 c2 beautyforashes1
I am really loving your story! I love Keegan! Thank you for putting it up. Oh, in case you didn't know, you're an awesome writer!
I am really loving your story! I love Keegan! Thank you for putting it up. Oh, in case you didn't know, you're an awesome writer!
8/23/2009 c4 Avidreader222
i love james, he sounds very mysterious, but also romantic(:
i liked at the beginning how you had the conversation with the girls..it seems like a lot of times in fictionpress stories, theres no dialogue, just descriptions and such. its not too cliched, but dont make audrey oblivious to james' obvious attraction to her...that would be cliched and cheesy!(: cant wait for the update!
i love james, he sounds very mysterious, but also romantic(:
i liked at the beginning how you had the conversation with the girls..it seems like a lot of times in fictionpress stories, theres no dialogue, just descriptions and such. its not too cliched, but dont make audrey oblivious to james' obvious attraction to her...that would be cliched and cheesy!(: cant wait for the update!
8/23/2009 c4 9rebmetpes-86
I think so far the story is moving along at a good pace. I like the little cliffhanger at the end of this Chapter - you get a sense of what is going to happen yet you are not entirely sure exactly what is going to play out.
Not sure what I think of Keegan and James right now. James especially I can't make out. My heart ached a little bit when Audrey's opinion of the flower and the potential secret admirer changed so drastically when she found out who had given it, but perhaps that is just me.
9rebmetpes-86I think so far the story is moving along at a good pace. I like the little cliffhanger at the end of this Chapter - you get a sense of what is going to happen yet you are not entirely sure exactly what is going to play out.
Not sure what I think of Keegan and James right now. James especially I can't make out. My heart ached a little bit when Audrey's opinion of the flower and the potential secret admirer changed so drastically when she found out who had given it, but perhaps that is just me.
8/22/2009 c4 8JamieBell
Haha, she fished the flower out of the trash. I would too. It's too bad Keegan saw it, but it's cool to see that James is as secretly melodramatic as Audrey. I like the Berlin Wall analogy, that was very clever. To answer your question, it's a bit cliched, but it's refreshing because the characters themselves seem pretty unique. So it's fun to read! Looking forward to what happens next! :)
8JamieBellHaha, she fished the flower out of the trash. I would too. It's too bad Keegan saw it, but it's cool to see that James is as secretly melodramatic as Audrey. I like the Berlin Wall analogy, that was very clever. To answer your question, it's a bit cliched, but it's refreshing because the characters themselves seem pretty unique. So it's fun to read! Looking forward to what happens next! :)
8/22/2009 c4 1VanillaCentaur
Keegan's nice and all, but James is more interesting. He seems to have more depth, not to say Keegan is shallow. I just like James better... :)
1VanillaCentaurKeegan's nice and all, but James is more interesting. He seems to have more depth, not to say Keegan is shallow. I just like James better... :)
8/22/2009 c4 1grand piano
Hey hon. Great story so far - I like how it's against the cliche; The cheerleader who's never been kissed, jocks who are actually intelligent and sympathetic, and bad boys who aren't the typical bad boys... and I like that, because my high school was so not drama, as in those typical jocks, cheerleaders, and what not. Sure we had the goths, and the drama class table, but I think cliches should be kept to a minimum sometimes. However you're doing great so far, and I'm liking our character Audrey. A tad melodramatic though ;)
Anyway, criticism about the story itself. Dialogue is a bit forced in areas (e.g. cheerleaders talking in the beginning of chapter 4). It doesn't seem to flow smoothly, and I found myself ignoring all of it and scrolling to the bottom.
That's really it from me. The characters are lovable. Pacing is great, and humour is always a plus :) Update soon, and it shows you're enjoying writing it. Take care!
1grand pianoHey hon. Great story so far - I like how it's against the cliche; The cheerleader who's never been kissed, jocks who are actually intelligent and sympathetic, and bad boys who aren't the typical bad boys... and I like that, because my high school was so not drama, as in those typical jocks, cheerleaders, and what not. Sure we had the goths, and the drama class table, but I think cliches should be kept to a minimum sometimes. However you're doing great so far, and I'm liking our character Audrey. A tad melodramatic though ;)
Anyway, criticism about the story itself. Dialogue is a bit forced in areas (e.g. cheerleaders talking in the beginning of chapter 4). It doesn't seem to flow smoothly, and I found myself ignoring all of it and scrolling to the bottom.
That's really it from me. The characters are lovable. Pacing is great, and humour is always a plus :) Update soon, and it shows you're enjoying writing it. Take care!
8/22/2009 c4 drunkoffwooder
I love your story, but these four chapters feel something like a drawn-out introduction. The story needs something to shake things up a little.
Update soon!
I love your story, but these four chapters feel something like a drawn-out introduction. The story needs something to shake things up a little.
Update soon!
8/22/2009 c4 citrus raindrops
i love this story so far! keegan seems interesting, but i have to say, i'm more intrigued by james. i think the story's alright and not too cliched. the pace is somewhat slow i suppose, but it fits the story so i wouldn't worry about that either. i'm guessing from what happened with the little boy that a lot of guys are going to try to steal audrey's first kiss now. oh, and you said that you're determined to finish this story as soon as possible? does that mean it's a short story? update soon! would love to read more =D
i love this story so far! keegan seems interesting, but i have to say, i'm more intrigued by james. i think the story's alright and not too cliched. the pace is somewhat slow i suppose, but it fits the story so i wouldn't worry about that either. i'm guessing from what happened with the little boy that a lot of guys are going to try to steal audrey's first kiss now. oh, and you said that you're determined to finish this story as soon as possible? does that mean it's a short story? update soon! would love to read more =D