for Ravenwood1/9/2010 c9 
1JWood
I'm really curious what this story is about. I thought the little girl was her but apparently she's rebecca. Wonder what happened to her. I'm guessing the little boy is crow boy, right? I can't wait for the next chapter. This is so intriguing.
1JWoodI'm really curious what this story is about. I thought the little girl was her but apparently she's rebecca. Wonder what happened to her. I'm guessing the little boy is crow boy, right? I can't wait for the next chapter. This is so intriguing.
12/31/2009 c2 8youwillneverguess
It's funny, as I'm reading this, I'm staring at the giant pile of clothes on my floor that my mum is nagging me to clean up. But instead of unpacking, I have to pack. I'm leaving for America tomorrow (just a trip, not to live). My mother gets home in about, say, half an hour, and will decapacitate me if I haven't started. I was just thinking, "just 'til the end of the chapter, just 'til the end" but your chapters are so incredibly long!
(It works for your story, though. It's a good thing.)
I love your writing! It is carefully constructed, but laid-out simply, so it flows and is easy to read. I spotted a few grammatical errors over the first two chapters (I'm anal like that) but apart from that, I don't think there is much I can critisize.
Since I'm only on chapter two, I haven't reached any major hints to the plotline yet, except for maybe the story about the girl and the boy, and the suspense is killing me, but i'll read more and review when I have time!
Keep writing though, please; I absolutely love this!
- youwillneverguess
8youwillneverguessIt's funny, as I'm reading this, I'm staring at the giant pile of clothes on my floor that my mum is nagging me to clean up. But instead of unpacking, I have to pack. I'm leaving for America tomorrow (just a trip, not to live). My mother gets home in about, say, half an hour, and will decapacitate me if I haven't started. I was just thinking, "just 'til the end of the chapter, just 'til the end" but your chapters are so incredibly long!
(It works for your story, though. It's a good thing.)
I love your writing! It is carefully constructed, but laid-out simply, so it flows and is easy to read. I spotted a few grammatical errors over the first two chapters (I'm anal like that) but apart from that, I don't think there is much I can critisize.
Since I'm only on chapter two, I haven't reached any major hints to the plotline yet, except for maybe the story about the girl and the boy, and the suspense is killing me, but i'll read more and review when I have time!
Keep writing though, please; I absolutely love this!
- youwillneverguess
12/30/2009 c2 Ipaintwithwords
Great chapter...:)
The town sounds perfect on the surface, yet underneath, perfects currents of something more sinister? Lovely detail.
And Jayme, clearly daddy's girl of the family, his favorite. I am interested to see how that plays out as I have a feeling there is more to that than meets the eye.
The crow on the window...nicely done. Would have creeped me out :)
Great chapter...:)
The town sounds perfect on the surface, yet underneath, perfects currents of something more sinister? Lovely detail.
And Jayme, clearly daddy's girl of the family, his favorite. I am interested to see how that plays out as I have a feeling there is more to that than meets the eye.
The crow on the window...nicely done. Would have creeped me out :)
12/27/2009 c5 2Lily-Petals000
I really like this story so far! You're an amazing writer! I'd keep reading but I'm too tired! AGH! lol.
2Lily-Petals000I really like this story so far! You're an amazing writer! I'd keep reading but I'm too tired! AGH! lol.
12/27/2009 c1 Ipaintwithwords
Wow, I am intrigued by this and am glad to have found it :)
You have lovely descriptions and I am eager to see where this story goes...
Wow, I am intrigued by this and am glad to have found it :)
You have lovely descriptions and I am eager to see where this story goes...
12/26/2009 c9 E. Cuppa Tea
yes! finally, names :D although i am still curious what Crow's real name is. I can't wait for the next chapter. Keep going! Incredible story and writing, if you ask me.
yes! finally, names :D although i am still curious what Crow's real name is. I can't wait for the next chapter. Keep going! Incredible story and writing, if you ask me.
12/26/2009 c9 2Becca88
I liked how the Raven Guy was 'What do you call me in your mind?' Geez, what an ego. And the poison ivy line? Ha!
The last italic parts are adding up to something very interesting. Please, please update soon!
Thanks, and Happy Holidays!
2Becca88I liked how the Raven Guy was 'What do you call me in your mind?' Geez, what an ego. And the poison ivy line? Ha!
The last italic parts are adding up to something very interesting. Please, please update soon!
Thanks, and Happy Holidays!
12/26/2009 c9 2Jordan Baines
Things are starting to fit together now - the little end parts with the rest of the current-day storyline. This time we got names. I wonder where Crow Boy fits in.
Please DO NOT wait so long to update again! I love the suspense you're building.
Oh, and yeah, Ben-Hur - a little light reading, eh?
2Jordan BainesThings are starting to fit together now - the little end parts with the rest of the current-day storyline. This time we got names. I wonder where Crow Boy fits in.
Please DO NOT wait so long to update again! I love the suspense you're building.
Oh, and yeah, Ben-Hur - a little light reading, eh?
12/26/2009 c8 Jordan Baines
I like all the talk about the lighthouse. So mysterious.
But embalming?
Yuck.
I like all the talk about the lighthouse. So mysterious.
But embalming?
Yuck.
12/26/2009 c8 E. Cuppa Tea
this is amazing! i love all the characters, especially the lighthouse boy. he's intriguing. the story is really becoming suspenseful, leaving me with a whole bunch of questions. i'll look forward to your updates :D
this is amazing! i love all the characters, especially the lighthouse boy. he's intriguing. the story is really becoming suspenseful, leaving me with a whole bunch of questions. i'll look forward to your updates :D
10/27/2009 c7 2Jordan Baines
Guy in the lighthouse is the grabby sort. He sure was friendly, like a stranger with candy.
Good chapter. Looking forward to more soon.
2Jordan BainesGuy in the lighthouse is the grabby sort. He sure was friendly, like a stranger with candy.
Good chapter. Looking forward to more soon.
10/27/2009 c7 2Becca88
This guy at the lighthouse is so creepy, and he just takes her stuff? Liberties... She should run. The kids at the end, I know they work into this, but they are so intriguing.
Kinda haunting.
Update sooner!
2Becca88This guy at the lighthouse is so creepy, and he just takes her stuff? Liberties... She should run. The kids at the end, I know they work into this, but they are so intriguing.
Kinda haunting.
Update sooner!
8/31/2009 c6 2Jordan Baines
That guy in the lighthouse sure had a lot of questions, and what a shock to find anyone else ther! So Ian seems nice. Interesting people she's meeting. Good chapter.
2Jordan BainesThat guy in the lighthouse sure had a lot of questions, and what a shock to find anyone else ther! So Ian seems nice. Interesting people she's meeting. Good chapter.