
8/12/2009 c1
115ArekuKawaii
I liked the last two lines of this poem the best. They are sharp and they flow well together. I think they flowed the best out of the entire poem. Also, despite a more simple diction for those two lines they still held the proper amount of intelligence for a line like that.
I didn't like the concept for it was quite cliche and overdone. Also, a few lines didn't need the comma, because that would have helped the flow better.

I liked the last two lines of this poem the best. They are sharp and they flow well together. I think they flowed the best out of the entire poem. Also, despite a more simple diction for those two lines they still held the proper amount of intelligence for a line like that.
I didn't like the concept for it was quite cliche and overdone. Also, a few lines didn't need the comma, because that would have helped the flow better.