for Deeper4/26/2010 c1 Isca
Jesus. The repetition of the line "make it dig a little deeper" is absolutely heart-wrenching. I love it. The tone is quite powerful and raw here. It's a short poem, on a relatable subject, but you made it your own. Keep up the good work. :)
Jesus. The repetition of the line "make it dig a little deeper" is absolutely heart-wrenching. I love it. The tone is quite powerful and raw here. It's a short poem, on a relatable subject, but you made it your own. Keep up the good work. :)
7/30/2009 c1 
5SilentVoices
Very depressing.
I thought that it could have been a bit longer to expand on the emotional level. But overall, a decently written poem. Kudos. :)
5SilentVoicesVery depressing.
I thought that it could have been a bit longer to expand on the emotional level. But overall, a decently written poem. Kudos. :)
7/30/2009 c1 CandleQueen
"I push a little harder,
make it dig a little deeper."
I liked the added emphasis of the repeated lines, and the image of the cut 'going alongside the others.'
-Ramen
"I push a little harder,
make it dig a little deeper."
I liked the added emphasis of the repeated lines, and the image of the cut 'going alongside the others.'
-Ramen